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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been rewritten and I need an input from editors not familiar with text, before I can go to FAC.

Thanks, Ruslik (talk) 09:53, 13 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • It needed some minor copy editing, but overall I think it is in good shape. There is some terminology that may be unclear to the non-specialist: phase function, co-rotational inclination resonance and co-rotational eccentricity resonance. I'm also unclear about the use of 'longitude' in the Arcs section. Could the reference system for the longitudes be explained somewhere? Thank you.—RJH (talk) 17:45, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    I added notes. Ruslik (talk) 09:24, 17 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

  • I did not think that bold words in the lead could also be linked - see WP:LEAD
  • Per WP:MOSNUM, spell out numbers less than ten, so fix As of 2008, it is known to consist of 5 named rings. Also could this sentence and the next be combined to flow better?
  • Provide context for the reader, so I owuld explain that Triton is Netune's largest moon in William Lassell, the discoverer of Triton, thought he had seen a ring around the planet.[1]
  • I like the lead image Image:Neptunian rings scheme.png, but the labels are not really legible on my computer in the article (300 px wide)
  • Isn't Uranus iteself younger than the solar system? Their age is probably less than the age of the Solar System.[3]
  • Article could use a copyedit to clean up the prose a bit - for example The width of this ring is about 2 000 km and [its] orbital radius is 41 000–43 000 km.[2] It is a faint ring with the [an] average normal optical depth of around 10−4,[a] and with a[n] equivalent depth of 0.15 km.[b][3] The fraction of dust in this ring is ]varies?] from 40 to 70%.[11][3] Should percent be spelled out?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:58, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for a review. What do you think is better to increase the size of the image or the font size? Ruslik (talk) 09:44, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The image is plenty big already! I'd increase the font size, personally... MeegsC | Talk 22:31, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, I would make the fonts bigger, not the image. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 01:45, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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