Wikipedia:Peer review/Rennell Island/archive1

This peer review discussion has been closed.

Rennell Island

• A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for October 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I was hoping other editors can make contributions for a featured article status. The island has vast history and is the only area falling under both Polynesia and Melanesia.

Thanks, Phenss (talk) 22:54, 5 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

• Large chunks of the article are unreferenced, and this would be a problem at FAC. Strongly suggest finding references for most of the article.
• You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, and my first suggestion would be to get your references into order. A number of your website references lack publisher and/or last access dates, which are the bare minimum needed for WP:V. Books need publisher, author, and page number on top of title. When you've got those mostly straightened out, drop me a note on my talk page and I'll be glad to come back and look at the actual sources themselves, and see how they look in terms of reliability, like I would at FAC. 14:19, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: Fixing the WP:V problems should be the first thing on your to-do list. Here are a few more suggestions for improvement:

• The lead should be a summary or abstract of the main text. Ideally, it should include at least a mention of all the sections in the main text. Please see WP:LEAD.

• Quantities expressed in the metric system should also be expressed in the imperial system. I find the convert template handy for this. I added some examples to the lead of the article so you can see how these templates work.

• A copyeditor would see and fix many of the small errors I see in the article. For example, the section heads do not get terminal periods.

• You might look at island articles featured on Wikipedia to get ideas. St Kilda, Scotland, for example, is a featured article about an island archipelago. You'll find a list of all the FA articles in the encyclopedia at WP:FA.

I hope you find these few suggestions helpful. If you have questions, please post them here. Finetooth (talk) 21:17, 9 October 2008 (UTC)

Done Thanks to you both. I have done some more work and hopefully incorporated your suggestions. Phenss (talk) 12:52, 10 October 2008 (UTC)