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Performance appraisal

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am completing this Wikipedia article as a project for a graduate course at Ball State University, and I would like to produce a commendable piece of work. Also, it is my intention to present my work and research at a meeting with my peers and professors in mid-April. I would very much appreciate any advice, suggestions, constructive criticisms, etc. Thank you for your time.

Thanks, Jlael303 (talk) 05:23, 30 March 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• Lead could be a touch longer, two paragraphs completely summarising the article.
• Avoid all the overcapitalisation throughout, e.g. "Applications of Performance Appraisal Results" -> "Applications of performance appraisal results".
• "discussion [1] " avoid spaces before refs. Ideally place refs directly after punctuation.
• "weaknesses, etc. [2][4]." don't put punctuation after refs either.
• "Performance Management " no need to capitalise Management.
• "administration[7][5]." make it "administration.[5][7]"
• "Other potential benefits include" if you insist on having a list, use a bullet-pointed one by using an asterisk at the start of each line.
• “At the -> use straight punctuation marks, i.e. "
• Some whitespace at the beginning and end of the article.
• Online ref needs publisher, publication date, author, access date etc where possible.
• Page ranges needs en-dash, not hypen per WP:DASH.

The Rambling Man (talk) 14:07, 11 April 2012 (UTC)