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Navenby

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I've listed this article for peer review because…I would like to polish it up to the highest standard possible.

Thanks, Seahamlass (talk) 15:33, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Hello Seahamlass, here are some comments which may help you on your quest for one of those little bronze stars...!

• Per WP:HEAD, you should avoid over-capitalising, so "Early History" should be "Early history" etc.*: Done
• Any chance of making the co-ordinates at the top of the page read in degrees, minutes, seconds with a N for north and W for west? I think you can modify it to be coords dms if memory serves...Sorry: Really sorry, can't work out how to.
• The WP:MOS#Images recommends that you don't "squeeze" text between two images. With thirty images on this page, it's probably over-illustrated so try to avoid having images squashing the text.*: Done
• "Chapel Lane" - why italics? same with all the other italics in the early history section, is there a good reason for using italics here? Reply: Sorry - thought I had to do that to street names, have now removed the italics*: Done
• Curiously, despite my previous point, I would think that "Nafni+by" should be, at least, in quotations perhaps also italicised.*: Done
• "October 17th" - October 17 or 17 October, but ditch the "th" - see WP:DATE.*: Done
• Ref [15] is used twice for the quote, no need.*: Done
• Image:Stpeterchnav.jpg you say you have written permission to use this. Does Wikipedia also have that written permission? *: Done Reply I have written permission for all the photos used. I'm happy to pass that on to Wikipedia, but not sure how to do that.--Seahamlass (talk) 16:45, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
• RAF wasn't formed until 1 April 1918, so the fledgling RAF didn't exist in 1917...*: Done Changed to the Royal Flying Corps and the Royal Naval Air Service.
• Argh, "WW1"? Generally British English would refer to this as the "First World War".*: Done!
• "8 for World War Two" - "eight for the Second World War"*: Done
• Ensure that image captions which are fragments don't have full stops and image captions that are grammatically complete sentences do have a full stop.*: Done
• Does Wikipedia have permission to use Image:Navenbywitch.jpg?*: Done Reply Yes, I have an email from the Portable Antiquities Scheme, granting me permission to use it on Wikipedia.
• Governance paragraph has several short paragraphs, could do with merging them to make the prose flow better.
• Not sure of the style of these articles but in the topography section , I'm really not keen on the in-line link to geographical co-ordinates. Reply: I don't like it either much, but I have noticed in other peer reviews that editors have been told to put it in, so I think I had better keep it.
• No spaces between citations please, so [36] [37] needs adjustment.*: Done
• Not sure I understand your source for climate statistics, "Source: MSN Years on Record: 11"? Can you clarify?*: Done Changed and simplified.
• "next 5 years " five years.*: Done
• Can you link to something relevant for "Grade II listed" and be consistent with II-listed and II listed.*: Done
• "It is allegedly ..." something like "It is claimed to be..." with appropriate citations would be more encyclopaedic.*: Done
• Numerical ranges should be separated with an en-dash, not a hyphen, so "aged 5-15" should be "aged 5–15".*: Done
• "rate was 3" - 3 isn't a rate, it needs a "per..."*: Done
• "20.18 km" - use the convert template for the imperial-ists amongst us.*: Done
• "now 47.9% do" - now? needs context, like, As of March 2008, ...*: Done
• 1859/60 - 1859–60. There are others...*: Done - Several anyway!
• "1832.[63]x " - what's the x?*: Done Random character removed!
• Avoid bullet point lists in potential FA's when prose would be better.Fixed them.*: Done
• Culture and community section could use some work on prose, merging paragraphs, reducing the over illustration.*: Done: Took out a couple of pictures, merged paragraphs, removed bullet points etc.
• Shouldn't Under 11 be Under-11? Not sure myself...*: Done Looks better like this anyway!
• "Tracey Duxbury " - again, why italics? *: Done Correcte - italics removed.
• Trim the external links to those directly relevant.*: Done

That's a good start for you. Let me know if you need anything more from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:11, 20 March 2008 (UTC)