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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to get it to good article status.

Thanks, Davest3r08 >:) ^(talk) 13:56, 27 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments after a quick skim:

There is an excessive use of quotes throughout the article. I would remove the two block quotes and instead summarise the prose so the reader knows the most important information. Done Davest3r08 >:) ^(talk) 11:22, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The reception section falls into the "X says Y" pattern and seems to be a collection of quotes WP:RECEPTION has information on how to avoid this. Also, the reception section should summarise what different reviewers highlighted was good/bad in the album.
"the album has frequently been included in lists" -> "the album has been included in several lists" Done Davest3r08 >:) ^(talk) 11:22, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The last paragraph of "Production and recording" section needs a citation. Done Davest3r08 >:) ^(talk) 11:22, 3 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 04:59, 2 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]