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Miss Meyers

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to take it to FAC, and am looking for any rough spots in the prose (what there is of it), anything that doesn't make sense to the non-horseperson, and any ideas for things that would make the context clearer.

Thanks, Ealdgyth - Talk 13:37, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: This one is easy, quite clear to a non-horseperson. The bishops are tougher than the horses.

• The image needs alt text.

• "Quarter Horse" links to a dab.

Lead

• "She won $28,725.00 ($228,598 in 2010) on the racetrack as well as 17 races." - It might be more clear to say "(equivalent to $228,598 in 2010)". Also, would $28,725 be better than $28,725.00? You omit the cents further down in the article.

Pedigree

• The footnotes after Miss Myers in the chart should be flipped from [8][1] to [1][8].

Citations

• Citations 6 and 7 need publication dates and dates of most recent access, or maybe it's just that the publication dates should be added to the corresponding references in the Reference section.

I hope this helps. Finetooth (talk) 23:20, 13 January 2010 (UTC)