Wikipedia:Peer review/Meteos/archive1

Meteos

I don't recall working hard on an article like this one before so I'm trying to figure out what needs improvement for this page as I want to take it to GAN and later FAC. Besides the expansion of the Reception page I'm unsure what else there is to work on for the page.

Thanks, GamerPro64 02:32, 8 April 2017 (UTC)

Looking alright. Few things I would touch:

• "Each planet is given their own music. The music used for each planet ranged from classical, country, pop, Bali, and music reminiscent of Space Invaders." Seems out of place considering all video games have different music. Maybe you could create a music section or move it to development and add something more related to it.
• "Meteos was developed for the Nintendo DS system." seems to lack impact on the article. I would remove the image unless the staff members commented some stuff about the console.
• Move "The game was compared to other puzzle games such as Tetris and Lumines, also released by Q Entertainment for the PlayStation Portable." to reviewers' comments.
• Was most reception positive?

Nevertheless the article seems to be in good shape. I would also appreciate if you have the time to comment in my peer review, Wikipedia:Peer review/Yu Kanda/archive1. Regards.16:43, 8 April 2017 (UTC)Tintor2 (talk)

Comments from Scribolt

Some really good content in there. I've got some copy editing suggestions mostly, for you to use, or not.

Lede

• "The game offers multiple modes, including a story mode." → Suggest remove. Most games feature multiple modes, it doesn't really deserve highlighting in the lede. Alternatively, if you're trying to emphasise that this is unusual for puzzlers, I'd suggest saying so i.e. "Unlike similar puzzle games, the game features a story mode". Although that may need sourcing.
• "Inspiration for Meteos came from video game Missile Command, TV series 24, and film The Matrix.". → "Sources of inspiration for Meteos included the video game Missile Command, the TV series 24, and the film The Matrix."
• "Later versions of the game were released for mobile phones and the Xbox Live Arcade." → Question(s). This is a bit confusing, are the alternative versions listed in the sequels section considered as 'later versions'? They seem pretty dissimilar. When I read later versions, I think of a port, with minor changes. If these updates are considered to be the same game, I would use 'Updated versions' instead of later versions and they should probably appear in the infobox under platforms. If they are considered as sequels / remakes, I'd probably say something like "Various adaptations of the game were later released on..."

Gameplay & Plot

• "Described as a "shoot-and-lift-up puzzle" game,[5] Meteos has players moving colored pieces of blocks, called Meteos, falling from the top of the screen with the Nintendo DS stylus. Lining up three or more of the same colored Meteo horizontally or vertically cause them to boost them and any other block on top of them into the sky and be moved off the playing field." → "Described as a "shoot-and-lift-up puzzle" game,[5] the core gameplay mechanic in Meteos involves players moving colored blocks, called Meteos, that fall from the top of the screen with the Nintendo DS stylus. Aligning three or more of the same colored Meteo horizontally or vertically cause them to ignite and travel upwards, and if they or any other blocks above them move off the screen they are removed from the playing area."
• "One example includes a giant hammer that can destroy multiple Meteos with a few swings." → "One such example is a giant hammer that can destroy multiple Meteos with a few swings."
• "With every Meteo sent out of the playing field are collected and cached in a virtual bank, where they can be used to unlock new planets, aliens, and sounds." → "Each Meteo that is sent out of the playing field is collected and cached in a virtual bank, where they can be used to unlock new planets, aliens, and sounds."
• Question: How does the game end? I can't remember, but you should state what needs to happen to reach the next stage in the Story mode, or get a game over.
• "The plot of the game is the evil planet Meteo sending its matter known as Meteos to other planets, killing life and destroying worlds. By chance, three of same the Meteos fused together and launched it and other Meteos back into space. Civilizations from other planets plan a counterattack against Meteo. The player travels from planet to planet on The Metamo Ark, a warship constructed out of Meteos ore. Taking branching paths, with the last level having the player battle and defeating the planet Meteo." → "The plot of the game centres on the 'evil' planet Meteo, which is sending it's matter (the Meteos of the title) to other planets, killing life and destroying worlds. After three Meteos of the same colour fuse together and launch both themselves and other Meteos back into space, civilizations from other planets plan a counterattack against Meteo. The player travels from planet to planet on The Metamo Ark, a warship constructed out of Meteos ore. The story features branching paths, with the last level requiring the player battle and defeat the planet Meteo itself."

Development and Release

• "The game first came into fruition when Tetsuya Mizuguchi asked Masahiro Sakurai to make a falling block puzzle." → "The game was first conceived when Tetsuya Mizuguchi asked Masahiro Sakurai to make a falling block puzzle." (Came to fruition means that it would have been finished).

Awards and Accolades

• "The game has been listed as one of the best Nintendo DS games on Eurogamer,[41] GamePro,[42] and Nintendo World Report.[43] It was also called one of the best games of 2005 on Eurogamer." → "The game has also been listed as one of the best Nintendo DS games by Eurogamer,[41] GamePro,[42] and Nintendo World Report[43] and Eurogamer also named it as one of the best games of 2005".
• "With the announcement of the Wii U adding DS games to the system's Virtual Console, websites like GamesRadar and Nintendo Life listed the game as one of the possible additions they wanted to see." → "After the announcement that the Wii U would be adding DS games to the system's Virtual Console, websites like GamesRadar and Nintendo Life listed the game as one of the possible titles that they wanted to see made available."

Hope this was useful Scribolt (talk) 13:52, 10 April 2017 (UTC)