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Mario Nuzzolese[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to achieve high-quality article with pictures and more information available

Thanks, Mndv78 (talk) 23:34, 12 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting artice - here are some suggestions for improvement.

The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
One of the biggest problems I see is that there are no inline references.
Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase
My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
The language of the article is quite poor and needs to be cleaned up considerably - for example, they are silent movies, not "mute movies"

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 02:51, 17 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]