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Lymphangioma

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like some editing help and possibly some ideas of what other information I could add to the article itself. Also I need assistance with adding pictures of my own to my article.

Thanks,--Amitampocco (talk) 11:56, 18 November 2008 (UTC)

• The most obvious (and easy to fix) thing is that the article needs wikification.
• Pictures would be nice, if you want to add them, just click 'upload file' in the left column on the screen and you get guided through the process.
• Citations can be improved, use a good review article rather than webpages such as righthealth.com.
• The text about lymph nodes is too long, just have a short explanation, if people want to know more, they can click through to the lymph node article. --WS (talk) 16:55, 30 November 2008 (UTC)

Comment: I have part-wikified the lead section (mainly de-bolding), to make a start on the article's wikification. I suggest you take a good long look at Wikipedia manual of style and the various other style guide pages, to get a better idea of how a wikipedia article should be structured and presented. Also, at present the language is very specialised and hard for the general reader to understand - try and make the prose less like that of an article in a medical journal and more like an entry in a general encyclopedia. Make more use of wikilinks, especially with the more obscure medical terms. If you can do these things, I'd be willing to look again. Brianboulton (talk) 21:32, 1 December 2008 (UTC)