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List of Olympic men's ice hockey players for Russia

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because it meets the standards set by the other Olympic featured lists: Canada, Switzerland, and USA. Hoping to get some constructive comments before it goes up for FLC.

Thanks, Anthony (talk) 21:28, 25 November 2013 (UTC)

Comments from Rejectwater

• It looks like you're getting this dialed in. The alts need to be updated per WP:ALT, especially the Bush/Blair and Queen Elizabeth examples.
  • Not sure what you mean about "dialed in" haha, but alts have been updated.
• Skaters table - TOC alphabet links stop working after "G".
  • Formatting mistake, it's been fixed.
• Note about assists not being recorded until 1932 seems irrelevant as list only dates back to 1994.
  • Removed.
• I think at FLC you will have an issue with the Soviet Union-centric second paragraph. My thoughts on this would be to note in the opening paragraph that Russia has participated in the most recent five tournaments as it was previously part of the USSR. A bit about the Unified Team is necessary as Russia was a part of that squad, but much more beyond that and it becomes Ice Hockey History of the Soviet Union at the Winter Olympics.
  • Tweaked, will work more when I have more time.
• You know someone will bring up the third paragraph as well especially as much of what is discussed pre-dates Russia in the tournament.
  • Streamlined the NHL stuff.
• Move the "The Russian national team is co-ordinated by..." sentence to the opening paragraph. That's where you define the scope, inclusion criteria, and give that kind of background info.
  • Fixed.
• Overall I think the lead should focus more on the Russian players and what they have accomplished (or not) at the tournaments they have been in.
• Pavel Bure shaking hands with Vladimir Putin, but Putin not mentioned in the caption or the alt text?
  • Fixed

Regards, Rejectwater (talk) 00:14, 26 November 2013 (UTC)

• • I've addressed some of the issues, and when I have more time I'll try to get around to working more on the lead. But the smaller ones should be fine now. Anthony (talk) 16:59, 26 November 2013 (UTC)
    • Further tweaked the lead, so now it's much more Russia, less USSR. Hopefully this helps. Anthony (talk) 18:10, 29 November 2013 (UTC)

Comments by Josve05a

• This article is an orphan, as no other articles link to it. Please introduce links to this page from related articles. (t) Josve05a (c) 01:05, 30 November 2013 (UTC)