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July 2022 French government reshuffle[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I made it myself and it's always a good thing to ask for a peer review.

Thanks, Frenchpolit (talk) 23:59, 28 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I gave it a quick copy edit. Others who are more qualified than I am can weigh in on more formal matters if necessary. (The lede seeming quite long would be my only concern, but I imagine you don't want to bury the lede under the lists of ministers.) The text seemed quite solid to me. -- SashiRolls ^{🌿 · 🍥} 17:46, 30 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720[edit]

Comments after a quick skim:

I would move some of the information in the lede to a new section called "Background" to give the events that led to this its own section.
"Furthermore, multiple new junior-ministerial appointments were made and many figures with political experience during Macron's first term were promoted or even returned to government, as proven by Marlène Schiappa's appointment as State Secretary just a month after leaving the cabinet or Olivier Véran's appointment as the government spokesperson after being demoted in May. The new cabinet also included some new figures who were not career politicians, both in cabinet-level and in junior-ministerial jobs, as symbolized by the appointment of François Braun as Health and Prevention Minister." Needs citations.
Each row should have a citation at the end, or a citation should be at the top of each chart describing where this information came from.
Opinion polls section should be expanded upon.
Additional sources can be found at WP:LIBRARY, Google News and Scholar, or databases available from your local library system.

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 20:45, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]