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Judy Garland as gay icon

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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it comes close to GA standards but may not be there yet. Another set of eyes before a GA nom would be most welcome.

Thanks, Otto4711 (talk) 20:52, 16 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments - sorry this article is not close to GA. As it stands it is just a list of quotations loosely, and poorly strung together. The article lacks flow and depth. Very good resources such as Richard Dyer's work have not been fully exploited. The article lacks a coherent structure. Although we have the main article you have to say who and what she was, the years that she was active, and something about her genre. Then some social history is needed; more is needed about the attitudes to homosexuality (particularly to gay men) at the time. It is not enough to just include quotations about boys in tight trousers. You have to say homosexual relations between men were illegal and life was a struggle for them. The article should describe Garland's place in the wider gay sub-culture of the era. To produce a Good Article on this subject much more research is needed. It is an important subject but unfortunately the article is little more than a stub at the moment. I hate having to write this but if the article were to get an "easy" GA review and was then put up at FAC, it would be torn to shreds. Please don't shoot the messenger. Graham Colm ^Talk 12:27, 21 December 2008 (UTC)