Wikipedia:Peer review/Jesus/archive1

Jesus

The article is suprisingly comprehensive and there are not POV tags(suprisingly). It is well sourced, so I'm posting it here to see how it could reach FAC. Newbie222 02:28, 5 October 2005 (UTC)

First off this would be amazing to get as a FA and would get you kudos from everyone here :). Anyway, here are some structure issues:

1. One sentence paragraph in opening... for the lead try to have three long paragraphs here instead of the several splintered ones - see WP:LEAD
2. "Religious perspectives" - section could use an intro
   1. "Christianity" - several one-sentence paragraphs here. In general this is quite long compared to the other subsections of "Religous perspectives", I'd try to keep them all around the same length
   2. "Islam" - kill the list here and make it into prose... no need for it :)
   3. "Ahmadiyya Movement" - One sentence paragraph
   4. "Hinduism" - two one sentence paragraphs - both too short
   5. "Judaism" - again, no need for a list here
   6. "Other perspectives" - one sentence paragraphs, several too short. This can be difficult because of the subject matter, however
3. "Life and teachings" - generally uneven paragraphs - some too long, some even veer on being too long (although the shorts are the real issue)
4. " Names and titles" and " Cultural and historical background" some paragraphs too short
5. "Relics" - too short in general - consider making it a subsection someplace else or something
6. " Interpretations of Jesus" - this sounds like something that belongs in see also - if you want to describe these I'd try to do it with actual prose...
7. "Sources and further reading" - you need to seperate the sources from the further reading :)
8. "See also" needs to be sorted - see Autism#See also for an example.
9. "External links" - link farm alert!!! You should generally shoot for around 15 links for FAs

Ryan Norton ^{T | @ | C} 15:39, 5 October 2005 (UTC)

• Thanks for the input! Newbie222 00:30, 6 October 2005 (UTC)