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Henry Fownes Luttrell[edit]

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I have put this up for peer review because I am hoping to take it to GA standard and I would like feedback about improving the article.

Many thanks, Noswall59 (talk) 10:35, 11 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Rod This is an interesting article. A few comments:

The lead seems to have quite a lot of detail, particularly about his parliamentary career, some of which could be moved to the section "Member of Parliament", with more of a summary left in the lead.
- I've had a go at shortening the intro and making it more of a summary... let me know if it needs any more tweaks.
I would be interested in more on his development of Dunster Castle (including early use of wallpaper!) and construction of Conygar Tower.
- I've also done some research on the contributions he made to Dunster Castle and the grounds; I can see that you have done a lot of work on Dunster Castle's article, so perhaps you could let me know if I've addressed the matter properly, and if I've omitted anything. I don't have the Garnett book to hand and so I've used your citations to support three of my points (about the park, the Rococo style and the wallpaper).
If you want to go to GA it is often suggested that bulletted lists (eg the family) are turned into prose.
- I have turned most of it into prose - a lot of their children died as infants or when young, so I've put that into prose form; the four who were individually more notable I've left as a list, because I think it makes it easier, but I could tweak it if it's still not up to standard.
~~Is there a picture of him (eg this or this of the man and his wife which presumably would be out of copyright by now), if not you could include a picture of the castle or similar.~~
- I've added the images myself.— Rod ^talk 20:37, 11 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - I Thanks for the photos - I am never sure whether we can use digital copies of old paintings

Hope these are helpful.— Rod ^talk 19:06, 11 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@Rodw: Thanks for the review Rod - very helpful and much appreciated. I've commented above, regards, -Noswall59 (talk) 11:23, 12 September 2014 (UTC).[reply]