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Guantanamo captives' uniforms

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I've listed this article for peer review because I wish for comment from peers regarding a dispute that Geo Swan and I are having regarding the use of the term "detainee" as opposed to "captive" for prisoners held at Guantanamo Bay, Cuba. It is my position that the term "Detainee" is generally accepted in both the scholastic community, as well as a legal term of art as reflected in statute. Geo Swan maintains that this term is a Department of Defense term, and "captive" is a neutral term. I wish at this point to avoid an edit war on this issue, and the input of a neutral observer with qualifications on standards regarding generally accepted terms in articles may well put the matter to rest.

Your input regarding this matter is greatly appreciated.

I remain, sincerely yours Yachtsman1 (talk) 16:25, 11 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments

• Peer review is not really the place to resolve content dispute.
• From my point of view, and that of the BBC, "detainee" is preferred over "captive".

Comments on the rest of the article, should they be of use...

• Five paras in lead is too many per WP:LEAD.
• Page ranges in references need to use en-dash, not hyphen, per WP:DASH.
• Are you convinced that Compliant (JTF-GTMO) will ever have a specific article?
• This has a redlinked category, in which this is the only article so I suggest you remove it.
• Ref 4 is bare URL.
• Ref 5 and 11-26 need accessdates.
• Ref 5 in the lead should not be in italics.
• I think a more accurate definition of compliant (or non-compliant if you wish) should be in the article.
• "Bay - considered " should be an en or em-dash, not a hyphen.
• "in the iconic orange " iconic is POV.
• Not sure the Coney Island image is relevant - it's quite contraversial and doesn't need to be here in this article with the wealth of real detainee images.
• There are claims in the image captions which need references, such as "highly compliant detainees live in a communal setting and have extensive access to recreation"
• "Guantanamo captives whose uniforms were an issue" why is this repeated under the section heading?
• Why isn't isn ISN? And name Name? And notes Notes?
• "The Level 2" or "level 2" - be consistent.
• 679 and 987 have no notes, 987 has no ref...

The Rambling Man (talk) 13:26, 17 September 2008 (UTC)