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Golden Sun: Dark Dawn

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I've listed this article for peer review because this article has many tags that I don't know how to deal with. And I want to improve it to a higher-class.

Thanks, 123456789qwertacct (talk) 09:55, 5 August 2012 (UTC)

Comments from Dana Boomer

Hi! It looks like you've made quite a good start on this article. Technically, articles with major cleanup banners should not be brought to PR, but since you've asked about them specifically, I'll explain each of them and give suggestions on how to address them:

• Top banner (copyediting): Basically, this means that the article needs to be copyedited for flow, grammar, spelling, etc. If you don't feel up to doing this yourself, you may want to try asking at Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors.
• Gameplay (translation tag): This is again saying that this section needs to be copyedited, because it reads roughly and has quite a few grammatical errors. A copyedit to address the above tag should also take care of this one.
• Synopsis (in universe tag): This tag means that the section contains quite a few spots where the actions of the (fictional) characters are given like they were real (in other words, like these things actually happened in real life). Instead, these spots need to be rewritten to be more obvious that they are fictional: so, write things like "at the beginning of the game, the characters x and y are seen doing z", instead of "x and y do z".
• Reception (expansion tag): This tag specifies that the tagger thinks the section needs more information on release information. This generally includes things like when the game was first released in major countries, how many were sold (I see you have this for one country), if expansion packs were released, etc.
• There are also a couple of dead link tags, which mean that the URL for a reference has gone dead and needs to be fixed, replaced or archived.

You may also want to contact the editor who placed the tags, to see if he or she has additional comments on the article. I hope this helps, Dana boomer (talk) 15:43, 17 August 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for your suggestion, Dana boomer. And I'll spend a period of time in this :p--123456789qwertacct (talk) 07:45, 18 August 2012 (UTC)