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George Went Hensley

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This article has been copyedited and has passed a Good Article review, and I'm now tempted to try to get it up to Featured Article quality. I would like attention to the prose and clarity, any grammar errors? does it all flow well? As well as comprehensiveness, are there any obvious questions you have after reading it.

Thanks, Mark Arsten (talk) 23:35, 15 January 2012 (UTC)

• A few things:
  • Try the alt text checker - one of the two images on the page (the other being the "good article" symbol) has no alt text, it looks like.
  • I have done some further copyediting. Some of the sentences are unnecessarily long and/or use longer words when shorter, more common ones will do.
  • The material under "Theology" does some explaining of his reactions when someone died from snakebite, but it is not completely clear earlier - are there any records of things that he said at such a point? That he conducted a service for someone who died of snakebite (and wasn't lynched) seems to suggest that he didn't claim at the time that dying was due to not being "saved".
  • What in the world was his problem with baseball?
• Allens (talk) 21:47, 24 January 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the comments and copyediting! I'll go over the prose again and dig into the sources for some more details. Mark Arsten (talk) 22:01, 24 January 2012 (UTC)
  • Alright, Astynax and I have gone over the wording some and I have added in a few details. A snake handling minister friend of Hensley once witnessed a gunfight at a Baseball game, but I think it would be synthesis for me to speculate that that is the reason for his disdain. Are there any other specific improvements that you could suggest? Thanks, Mark Arsten (talk) 20:49, 31 January 2012 (UTC)

• You've pretty much answered the questions I've had, at least insofar as they can be answered. I can't think of anything specific at the moment - I very much like the improvements! Allens (talk) 22:33, 31 January 2012 (UTC)

• Thanks, glad to hear it! Mark Arsten (talk) 22:36, 31 January 2012 (UTC)