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Fuck Them All

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because the article was written by a non-native speaker of English (me) and it was nominated for GA but failed. Reviewer advised me to "go through a peer review and then re-nominate again".

Thanks, Europe22 (talk) 16:56, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• Maybe picky, but "It was the lead single from her sixth studio album, Avant que l'ombre..., and was released on 14 March 2005." I'd see it the other way around, "Released on 14 March 2005, it was the ...."
• You link acoustic guitar but not musical bridge. Seems a little odd to me!
• "but criticized for " but criticized it...
• " and the performance is available on" sounds a bit sales pitch, perhaps "the performance was released on the ... "
• "two &ndash and evantually " no need for the &ndash and typo on eventually.
• Don't think you need to wikilink France in the infobox.
• And would link SNEP not France for the certification.
• "On January 2005, the exact title, " > "In January 2005, the title, "
• "strong probability" -> "strong possibility".
• "Thus, as noted " not sure you need Thus.
• " like a too direct" -> "like too direct a "
• "was eventually played for" no need for eventually.
• "'mother f... vocal mix" really? Just checking, we're not censored after all.
• CD Maxi is overlinked.
• "war between the sexes" normally refer to this as "war of the sexes".
• "place in History" is History capitalised?
• In the Music and lyrics section, feminism is linked on the second instance.
• Also don't think you need to link guitar.
• "a so direct message" -> "so direct a message"
• "theoretically represent the human soul in its worst states" is this a direct quote? Needs a ref.
• scarescrows = typo
• "and breaks the wooden crosses" break.
• "that turns to crow" crows.
• "In France, at that time released only as a CD single," -> at what time? And perhaps "In France, it was released as a CD single only..."
• "CD maxi - Digipack" etc, use en-dash to separate these, not a hyphen.
• Page ranges in the refs need en-dash, not hyphen, per WP:DASH.
• Same goes for the hyphen in ref 1, should be an en-dash.
• Refs 70 to 73, spare ].

The Rambling Man (talk) 16:36, 15 December 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for your help. I'll try to fix all the things listed above. --Europe22 (talk) 17:34, 15 December 2011 (UTC)

You're welcome. Good luck with any GA or FA nominations. Best wishes. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:34, 15 December 2011 (UTC)