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Forensic entomology and society

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I've listed this article for peer review because we'd like as much input about this article as possible.

Thanks, ABrundage, Texas A&M University (talk) 02:19, 2 April 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: On reading this article it fails in my opinion to address the title, and seems to me to be a candidate for merger with the existing Forensic entomology article? How is this article different from the Forensic entomology article?

• The lack of any mention of the word "society" in the lead seems odd.
• The title should be repeated in the first sentence in the lead in bold, and should not be wikilinked. The current lead needs to summarize the entire article and should be 2-3 paragraphs long. See WP:LEAD
• Put information in context for the reader - see WP:PCR For example, nowhere do you mention that Sung Tz’u is a Chinese scholar.
• I fail to see the relevance of Italian physician Francesco Redi disproved the theory of "spontaneous generation",.. to the article. Sure it is very relevant to biology and to entomology, but how is it an example of forensic entomology - what crime or investigation was involved? If all that is needed for relavence are insects, then you might as well mention the maggots in corpses after some historical battles or fleas and the Black Death.
• References need to immediately follow punctuation or other refs - no spaces between please. See WP:CITE
• The relevance of most of your examples in the "Popular scientific and fictional literature in the 19th and early 20th centuries" (section title way too long) also escapes me.
• I would use the cite templates for consistentency in the references - see {{cite web}}, {{cite book}} and {{cite journal}}, for examples.

Hope this helps, I am going to add a suggested merge to tag to the article. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 16:41, 6 April 2008 (UTC)