Wikipedia:Peer review/Fluorine/archive2
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This article has hit GA yesterday. Following Pyrotec's advice, I'm beginning a new peer review. In fact, when GAN began, I realized I'd need another one after completing GAN, because I don't really see how can I help the article (talking of major things) further. The article, when I began working on it, was only C-class. Later, it hit B, A and GA. During this PR, I follow only one target:
- Bring the article to FAC condition
Sure, any help is appreciated! Please add anything that could be even slightly useful.
Thanks, R8R Gtrs (talk) 18:39, 24 March 2011 (UTC)
RJHall comments:
- Some FAC reviewers like the articles to list the nationality and profession of the individuals mentioned. Thus, for example, "French chemist Henri Moissan" rather than "Henri Moissan".
- The Alt text for the Fluorine cell room, PET scan and Flourine molecule images could use a little refinement for use by visually impaired readers.
- Well, for "Whole-body PET scan using 18F-FDG", you could perhaps describe it as "A rotating, transparent image of a human figure with targeted organs highlighted." Instead, it says, "Whole-body PET scan", which is essentially just a repeat of the caption and doesn't really describe it. I.e. how would you describe the image to, say, a lay person on the phone.—RJH (talk) 21:02, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
Oh, with one example that got useful. Done--R8R Gtrs (talk) 23:13, 26 March 2011 (UTC)
- You could mention skeletal fluorosis.
For a FAC review, I find it's a good idea to have all your ducks in a row with the citation section layout:
- I think Dean (1999) should be added to the Bibliography list for consistency.
- The ref. "see covalent radius of fluorine" should be in the Notes.
- Several references that list web sites could be filled out a little more. Please add what you can find (authors, work, publisher, date, access date, &c.).
- "High Oxidation States: Mercury tetrafluoride synthesized" Publisher? &c.
- "Discovery of fluorine" Access date? &c.
- "The mobility of cluster ions NeHe+ in helium gas" Publisher? &c.
- "The World’s Strongest Acid" Access date? &c.
- "The Russian Literature on Rocket Propellant" Access date? Publisher? &c.
- Some of the cites list titles in all caps. I'm sure they are the same as what is on the cite, but they would look more refined if the case were consistent with the others. (Use of all caps is sometimes frowned upon on the internet as it equates to SHOUTING. :) Example:
- The Morrison ref. doesn't list a date or page range.
- The "Leonel R Arana" ref. has authors listed inconsistently with the other cites: Last, First MI.; &c.
Thanks.—RJH (talk) 19:42, 24 March 2011 (UTC)
- There is one thing I would like to point out: in the very first section, 'a fluorine atom is more likely to receive a "missing" electron" is not grammatically correct. It should be "a fluorine atom is more likely to gain an electron". But check out my peer review of copper that's underway here. FREYWA 05:44, 27 March 2011 (UTC)
- Comment the Noble gas compounds to high oxidation states of elements discussion is skewed way too much towards the former. I strongly suggest removing a bit mroe from the NG section, AND add some more examples of high oxidation states of other elements (these two topics are essentially identical since F simply oxidizes the NG same way it does Cu(IV). Nergaal (talk) 14:43, 30 March 2011 (UTC)
Looks good. A few things to look into:
- The isotopes section needs info on the decay modes before and after the stable isotopes.
- Occurrence. Which countries are the largest sources of ore and which have the largest reserves?
- Hard thing...As of now, I've found only fluorite data (surprisingly even in Wikipedia). I'll try better, though--R8R Gtrs (talk) 19:39, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
- Compounds. "This bond is the strongest covalent bond in organic chemistry and is very stable." needs a cite.
- Biological roles. I'm not a fan of single paragraph sections; there is no need to give a title to a single paragraph.
--mav (reviews needed) 00:25, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
- There's a dead link. Apart from that, good work. — This, that, and the other (talk) 10:32, 12 April 2011 (UTC)