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First Lord of the Treasury

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I'm aiming for Good Article status, and would like some constructive feedback on how this article could further improve—to the extent that it meets the GA criterion. Anthøny (talk) 18:30, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Dr pda:

• You need to show the source for each statement in the article, through inline citations.
• The dates in the table no longer need to be linked.
• The article doesn't really say what the First Lord did, before the position became a sinecure.
• The article is quite short; so are Second Lord of the Treasury and Lord of the Treasury (the latter of which is not linked from the article). It might make sense to merge these three into one article, say Lord of the Treasury.
• The link for commission in the first sentence goes to Government agency, which is not really the meaning intended here; I would just drop the link as it is explained in the first paragraph of the body.
• Lords Commissioners of the Treasury, First Lord of the Treasury and Chancellor of the Exchequer don't need to be bolded in the Lords of the Treasury section.
• It might perhaps be instructive to mention that the office of Lord High Admiral was similarly exercised by a commission.
• The term ministry should be defined.
• The footnotes should be in a separate section to the references. Also, the two books currently quoted as sources are missing information such as publisher, location, date etc.

Hope this helps. Dr pda (talk) 05:45, 25 October 2008 (UTC)