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Cacua language

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I've listed this article for peer review because…i think it should be a featured article.

Thanks, Latinlover-sa (talk) 08:11, 4 May 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Since you want it to be a FA, I will make comments based on helping improve it towards a WP:FAC.

• A model article is always useful for ideas on structure, style, etc. I note that there are several language FAs, one of which is Mayan languages and may be a useful model.
• The article as written is quite short and will need to be expanded for FA to be as comprehensive as possible. See WP:WIAFA for all the FA criteria
• The lead of the article needs to a be a concise summary of the whole article, so this will need to be expanded from two sentences to two or three paragraphs (perhaps after the article is expanded). My rule of thumb is that every header should somehow be mentioned in the lead - see WP:LEAD
• For ideas on what to add when expanding, look at the other language FAs. For example there is nothing on Phonology, and Grammar and Literature are combined in one short section.
• This needs a copyedit for spelling (The speakares are located in Wacara...) and to polish the language (Another promising aspect is that even though literacy is low by international standards but still unlike most Indigenous Languages of the Americas literacy is higher in the aboriginal language around 10% as to Spanish, under 5%, the dominant national language of Colombia where all the speakers reported by Ethnologue reside within.[1] - I have almost no idea what this means) - again I would try to clean up some, but expand and then polish
• Any free images possible - pictures of the people who speak it or their villages or houses? An image is required for FA - not sure if the map would count
• Provide context for the reader - what does the Sample text in Cacua (Ded pah jwiít jwĩ jwíih cãac cha pahatji naáwát[5]) mean? Is it a grocery list or a history or a Bible verse? See WP:PCR
• Add more wikilinks - things like Hunter-gatherer etc.
• References need more complete data - for example internet refs need url, title, publisher, author if known, and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may help here.
• SIL is a disambiguation link - please fix it

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 15:16, 8 May 2008 (UTC)

• It had been very helpful, i continue to work on it, thank you for your suggestions. is there a way to put a check list on the article's talk page? why was it removed from the peer review page? how do i submit this to the league of copyeditors? would you mind if i striked your comments regarding improvements that i have implemented? what if i can't find more information on the article? for instance this language has very few speakers and there is not a lot of info out there about it? is there anywhere i can ask for others to collaborate and help?Latinlover-sa (talk) 02:18, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
  • It is OK with me to strike things in this peer review as you address them. It would also be OK to copy my items to the article's talk page. There was a problem with peer review several days ago that has been fixed. I would ask for help at WikiProject Languages or the Colombian Wikiproject (both have boxes on the article's talk page). If you can't find more information, you can't find it, but I think it needs to be expanded and cleaned up to become a FA. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:31, 14 May 2008 (UTC)