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I've listed this article (Blackford County Courthouse) for peer review because I have upgraded its footnotes with the goal of achieving Good Article or Featured Article status—depending on the thoughts of the reviewers.

Thanks, TwoScars (talk) 17:05, 18 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Lead image caption doesn't need a full stop.
  • " Blackford County courthouse" or " Blackford County Courthouse"? be consistent throughout.
  • "One of the more magnificent buildings in the region..." borderline POV.
    • I will see if I can find a quote as a replacement. In the Significance section, one quote already says “its size and architecture dominate”. TwoScars (talk) 15:31, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Fixed—Dropped "magnificent" and added a quote. TwoScars (talk) 22:19, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "that eventually became named " for some reason this jars me, maybe "that was eventually named..."?
    • Will work on that. Although the community was called Hartford, it was not official. Eventually, it became officially named Hartford, and was later changed to Hartford City. TwoScars (talk) 15:31, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Changed to "The small cluster of log cabins called Hartford....", and added a note that explains Hartford becoming Hartford City. TwoScars (talk)
  • "was not organized " I'm not sure I know what this means (I'm Brit so that may explain my ignorance?)
    • Will work on that too. Although the county was created by state government, no county government officials were appointed or elected. It took over a year (and more effort by state officials) before governing officials were in place. TwoScars (talk) 15:31, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Changed to "no county government was organized until..." TwoScars (talk) 19:31, 15 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Historic Marker on south lawn of Blackford County courthouse." no capital M required, nor a full stop.
  • "Total proposed ..." why not "The total proposed..."?
  • "Total cost ..." ditto.
  • "The area began a period of growth ..." odd sounding, maybe "The area experienced a period of growth"?
    • Changed to "The area experienced a period of economic growth...." TwoScars (talk) 23:16, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Commemorative plaque inside Blackford County courthouse." no full stop required.
  • "Later in October" I don't think you need "Later" but if you insist, I think you need a comma after it.
    • Dropped "Later", and edited text in that sentence. TwoScars (talk) 22:01, 15 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with gas included" what does that mean?
    • Changed to "with gas heat included" TwoScars (talk) 22:01, 15 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "a 165 foot " I would expect this to be hyphenated.
  • "The western side of the Blackford County courthouse." no need for the full stop. Check all other captions which are incomplete sentences - they don't need full stops either.
  • I don't think you need to link "window".
    • Removed link to window. Hoped to find a link to "fan window", but could not find one. TwoScars (talk) 22:16, 15 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "(See south side photo herein.)" not required.
  • "A clock can " A clock or The clock?
    • Change to "A clock face can ". The tower really contains a single clock mechanism with four clock faces. One clock face cannot appear from all four sides. TwoScars (talk) 22:29, 15 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Again, "(See photo herein.)" x2 no need.
  • Headings - a lot of capitals in here, does "Memorial" really need capitalising in the heading when it's not capitalised in the text?
    • Removed capitalizations of memorial and monument in headings and captions. TwoScars (talk) 22:47, 15 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Blackford Lodge #106 " don't use # to mean number in prose.
    • Fixed in prose, left in footnote and reference TwoScars (talk) 22:57, 15 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 55 needs to be formatted per usual for online links.
  • Second external link needs an en-dash rather than a hyphen per WP:DASH.

The Rambling Man (talk) 10:34, 13 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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