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Billboard Top Latin Albums[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have been working on it and on the list included for quite a while. All the lists (with the exception of the current one for 2009) are Featured Lists, and now I want a second opinion for the main article.

Thanks, Jaespinoza (talk) 20:31, 3 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: I did a bit of proofreading and minor fixing as I went, and here are a few more suggestions.

Lead

"The sample includes not only music stores and the music departments at electronics and department stores, but also direct-to-consumer transactions and Internet sales (both physical albums via Internet, and ones bought via digital downloads)." - Suggestion: "The sample includes sales at music stores, the music departments of electronics and department stores, direct-to-consumer transactions, and Internet sales of physical albums or digital downloads." Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"The Latin Pop Albums chart features music only from the pop genre, while the Regional Mexican Albums chart includes information from different genres like Duranguense, Norteño, Banda and Mariachi." - I think all of these genres should be lower-cased with the possible exception of Duranguense, since it derives from a place name. In other words, "banda" rather than "Banda". Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"Fellow Mexican performers Los Temerarios are the group with more chart toppers (8)." - "Most' rather than "more"? Also, for consistency, "eight" should be written as a word. Maybe this sentence should end thus: "... the group with the most chart-toppers, eight". Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"The late Tejano superstar Selena is the female with more albums peaking at the top of the chart, with six." - "Woman" rather than "female"? "Most" rather than "more"? Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Since the Manual of Style generally deprecates orphan paragraphs consisting of single sentences, I'd recommend merging the last sentence of the lead with the Selena paragraph. Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Section heads

To avoid repeating the word "album" from the article title, perhaps "Artist with the most number-ones" and "Most weeks at number one would be better. Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I see "Year-end" in some places and "Year-End" in others. I recommend making them all say "Year-end". Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Date ranges

Date ranges get en dashes rather than hyphens per WP:MOSNUM. The many date ranges, such as 1993-1994, in the tables should be 1993–1994, and it's good form to compress these to 1993–94, and so on. Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

References

"Year End" needs a hyphen for consistency. Fixed Jaespinoza (talk) 19:48, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 20:44, 11 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]