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Big Shots (TV series)

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I've listed this article for peer review because even though this show was short-lived, I believe it might be at least on its way to being a good article. If no more than to keep articles to a certain quality.

Thanks, Esprit15d • talk • contribs 17:41, 17 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

• Expand the lead per WP:LEAD to at least two weighty paragraphs.
• "officially greenlit and given a thirteen-episode order " - very jargony.
• "It is aired on Thursday nights on 10:02PM Eastern/9:02PM Central" - was aired I guess now. Plus check the time formats against Wikipedia:DATE#Times
• Thursday repeated, no need for the second one.
• Move references per WP:CITE to get them immediately after punctuation where applicable.
• "effective October 25th" - check the date format vs WP:DATE.
• "Despite the order of thirteen episodes," - confusing, could be discussing the chronological order...
• Plot needs expansion, considerably. A plain quote is insufficient.
• Axe the "Mr. x", and stick with plain old "x" - this is an encyclopaedia.
• 18-49 needs an en-dash instead of a hyphen.
• What's the point in a timeslot column when you've already said when every show was broadcast (i.e. thursday nights 10.02pm).
• Season needs en-dash to separate, not hyphen.
• Explain what Rating and Share mean.
• Why was one of the ranks N/A?
• Don't use in-line citations like " http://www.zap2it.com/tv/ratings/" - use proper references.
• Expand references to use {{Cite web}} with all its lovely benefits.

That should help a bit to improve to the article. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:53, 22 March 2008 (UTC)