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Basarab I of Wallachia[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because it should be chequed against WP:NPOV. I neither can decide whether the article is broad in its coverage.
Thanks, Borsoka (talk) 19:02, 27 February 2015 (UTC)
Comments by 1bandsaw[edit]
Overall, this is a high quality article about an interesting individual. The sourcing is great, and it provides a thorough documentation of this ruler.
I do have a handful of questions and suggestions below, which will help clarify some things:
Towards independence section
The 'main article' link to Battle of Posada doesn't seem right here, as it really only deals with the second half of this section. Perhaps break this in two and then it would, otherwise just link to the battle where it comes in.
paragraph 1: "brawl" -- was this a personal fight or a battle between armies? "stated that Basarab's" what "was more powerful"? Did Stephen make the assessment, or the royal charter (written by Charles, I presume)?
paragraph 4: "I will drag him by his heard from his lair" head? beard? heart?
Family section
It would seem good to me to actually mention his daughter's name when linking to her, in keeping with most other articles about royalty/nobility.
Legacy section
paragraph 3: "chronicles used the denomination" perhaps simpler language could be used here, "chronicles used the name"