Wikipedia:Peer review/Ananthabhadram/archive1
Ananthabhadram[edit]
Quite a sensational attempt at film making, from a master of the visual art in India... well, POVs aside, this article may have a good chance to become a good article at least. Please, check and advise (if possible, lend a hand, too). Aditya Kabir 05:21, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
Comments by PC78[edit]
It's a good start, and the article seems to be well referenced. If you haven't already, you should take a look at Wikipedia:What is a good article? and Wikipedia:WikiProject Films/Style guidelines. My own observations:
- Lead section
- Ideally this should be two paragraphs long.
- Why mention the director's other films? What relevance do they have to this film?
- Says "The film was originally going to be directed by Sabu Cyril with actress Meera Jasmine in the lead", but doesn't say why it wasn't.
- I'm not sure what it means by "screened using satellite technology".
- Perhaps it could also give a brief summary of the "Inspirations" section?
- Production
- "and later Cyril became busy Shankar's film Anniyan." — busy with Shankar's film?
- Paragraph beginning "Kathakali has become an inspiration for many Indian films..." — this doesn't seem particuarly relevant. This is something that should be covered by the Kathakali article.
- Paragraph beginning "This interest in the work of Varma..." — again, this doesn't seem to be relevant. Should be covered in the Raja Ravi Varma article.
- Why mention the Jackie Chan film just because it uses the same martial art form?
- Plot summary
- Could do to be a bit longer. According to Wikipedia:WikiProject Films/Style guidelines, plot summaries should be "between 400 and 700 words". I count 317 here.
- Reception
- This section is quite short. If possible it should include box office results and critical response.
- I don't think it's enough to simply say "It also was a commercial success", even if that statement does cite a source.
- General
- The article could do with copyediting for grammer and spelling. There are some short and/or awkward sentences, eg "The film was originally to be directed by art director Sabu Cyril." I've already fixed the few typos I found, but there could be more.
- References — I see that some are labelled as being "in English", but since this is the English-language Wikipedia it should be sufficient to label those (if any) that aren't.
- External links — I could be wrong, but I don't think YouTube links are allowed. Is this film listed at All Movie Guide? If so you should add a link for that (and add it to the infobox as well).
- Red links — Personally I would either remove them or if possible create stubs for them.
- Images — Make sure you give a source for the two screenshots. If you created them yourself, then say so.
Hope you found that useful, and good luck getting this up to GA standard. Regards, PC78 23:57, 21 April 2007 (UTC).