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Amar la Trama

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want feedback about it to take it to Good Article status at least. I'll following this request closely to make the necesary changes.

Thanks, Jaespinoza (talk) 06:04, 23 September 2010 (UTC)

Comments from Jappalang

• www.estereofonica.com is down.

• www.guiasenior.com/contenidos/after/archives/2010/08/jorge-drexler-amar-la-trama.html is not Guia Senior's work. It is a press release by Jorge Drexler and his agents and should be noted and treated as such.

• What makes spanishcharts.com a reliable source? Please refer to Wikipedia:Wikipedia Signpost/2008-06-26/Dispatches and Wikipedia:Wikipedia Signpost/2008-07-28/Dispatches on how sources are generally judged.

• About.com is a situational source; the site's reliability is dependent on the author's expertise (which is best judged by third-party sources instead of about.com's proclaimations). What makes Tijana Ilich a respected expert on Latin music or who recognises her as such?

On the whole, I think the content is there to try for GA; however, there is a need for prose improvement. Several sentences do not sound correct to me, e.g. "An album, as told by the singer, playful, without "the melancholy and anguish" of 12 Segundos, his previous studio album." (incomplete sentence), "Amar la Trama is a result of an artistic evolution originated with the recording of Cara B, "with nine musicians playing and recording live on the album, I became interested on making music as in the past." the singer stated." (noun plus -ing, punctuations, and tenses), "... bringin great vitality and ..." (spelling), etc. Please enlist an able copy-editor to spruce up the language before going for GAN. Jappalang (talk) 08:34, 28 September 2010 (UTC)