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Aldred

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to FAC at some point, but it probably is full of jargon and needs some copyediting.

Thanks, Ealdgyth - Talk 19:17, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Hah, we meet again!

• Not keen that the infobox has his Birth name as Ealdred while most of the article uses Aldred.
• If you link English you probably ought to link ecclesiastic in the opening sentence...
• Link King of England rather than "king of England".
• Image sizes ought to comply with WP:MOS#Images so portrait images should use the upright modifier, for example.
• "The Handbook of British Chronology Third Edition says ..." - not keen on a handbook saying something...
• "Bishop of Hereford" or "bishop of Hereford"?
• Order citations numerically - [9][3] for example. And [28][3]
• "Aldred in 1046 led an unsuccessful ...", probably better to say that "In 1046, Aldred..."
• "moving of the see of Crediton to Exeter," jargon warning!
• "post-Conquest" - which conquest?
• I think Pope Nick's caption is a complete sentence? Thus a full stop/period is required.
• "Travelled" in Brit Eng, not a single l.
• Pages in references (if more than one) should use pp and (as you and your scripts know all too well) use the en-dash!

That's a good start. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:00, 25 April 2008 (UTC)