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A4 (Croatia)[edit]

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to nominate it for WP:GAN soon, so all suggestions are welcome and appreciated.

Thanks, Tomobe03 (talk) 12:34, 15 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Niagara

  • "The positive economic impact on the cities and towns it connects, as well as its importance to tourism in Croatia, is reflected in the motorway's national significance."
    • Reversed: "The motorway's national significance is reflected in the positive economic impact on the cities and towns it connects, as well as its importance to tourism in Croatia."

 Done per suggestion--Tomobe03 (talk) 17:21, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • "The motorway consists of two traffic lanes and an emergency lane in each driving direction separated by a central reservation. There are no emergency lanes in the tunnels. All intersections of the A4 motorway are grade separated. As the route traverses hilly terrain, it requires a substantial number of viaducts and tunnels, as well as two major bridges to span the Drava and Mura rivers"
    • Changed order of sentences so that the fact that there tunnels on the A4 is stated before the fact that they don't have emergency lanes: "As the route traverses hilly terrain, it requires a substantial number of viaducts and tunnels, as well as two major bridges to span the Drava and Mura rivers. The motorway consists of two traffic lanes and an emergency lane in each driving direction separated by a central reservation. There are no emergency lanes in the tunnels. All intersections of the A4 motorway are grade separated."

 Done per suggestion--Tomobe03 (talk) 17:21, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • "51% of TEA was owned by Astaldi, with the remainder owned by the Republic of Croatia."
    • It is preferred to not start a sentence with a numeral. Rewording it would be best, instead of writing the number out: "Astaldi owned 51% of TEA, with the remainder owned by the Republic of Croatia."

 Done per suggestion--Tomobe03 (talk) 17:24, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • I'd consider replacing one of the tunnel photos, as they are very similar (for a second, I thought they were the same photo), or at least seperating them a bit more.

 Done moved one of them further down the article a bit... I'll try to get another image for the article later on.--Tomobe03 (talk) 18:24, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Found some good photos on Panoramio, got permission from their uploader and placed them on the commons for review. Once the review is done I'll get those into the article!--Tomobe03 (talk) 00:37, 18 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nice job, so far the best one yet! ​​​​​​​​Niagara ​​Don't give up the ship 16:52, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments!--Tomobe03 (talk) 18:24, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]