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2008 Summer Olympics[edit]
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The Olympics wikiproject is working on improving this article for eventual GA and FA noms. All comments are useful, as it's a large and diverse article. One question in particular - should the list of participating NOC's be split off into a separate article?
Thanks, Geraldk (talk) 14:45, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
- I really can't think of much to offer for a comprehensive review. It's well done and referenced overall. The lead section paragraphs are each a bit too long perhaps, but it's hard to summarize that much. I do think the list of NOC's should go to a separate article and be linked to. There's not much lost that way and the article will be more readable. The calendar is similar. Finally, the statement "although some media outlets claimed that organizers ultimately failed to live up to this commitment." seems pretty watered down given the situation and the coverage of it. From what I recall there was fairly widespread coverage of China's censorship of international media despite the promise they made to the IOC. - Taxman Talk 13:52, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: I agree this looks very good - Iam going to read it through and make some suggestions for improvement.
- I agree the NOC list should be a separate article.
- In Costs (and throughout) I would make sure there are no spaces between punctuation and refs, so fix ...that surplus revenues from the Olympic Games would exceed the original target of $16 million. [6] I owuld also identify the other sources by name in Other sources, however, estimated that approximately $40 billion had been spent on the Games, ...
- The two images in the Torch relay section sandwish the text, which is a no-no per MOS:IMAGES - I think one could be moved down a bit and still be OK.
- There are so many great images in the 2008 Summer Olympics opening ceremony article that I would include one in the Opening ceremony section - perhaps File:BeijingOlimpicGames2008-08-08.jpg as it shows many of the elements used
- In the Sports section, this paragraph needs a ref The program for the Beijing 2008 Games was quite similar to that of the 2004 Summer Olympics held in Athens. The 2008 Olympics saw the return of 28 sports (some of which, such as aquatics, gymnastics and cycling, were divided into multiple disciplines), and held 302 events (165 men's events, 127 women's events, and 10 mixed events), one event more in total than in Athens. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Closing ceremony also needs aref or two - I would make it all one paragraph and would avoid short paragraphs (one or two sentences) throughout
- The TPE flag image should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over, per WP:MOS#Images. It also needs a more descriptive caption.
- Notes a and b need refs\
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 20:13, 27 June 2009 (UTC)