Wikipedia:Featured article review/Cyberpunk/archive1

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The article was removed 16:02, 11 July 2007.

Cyberpunk[edit]

Review commentary[edit]

Messages left at Anville and WP Science Fiction by --P4k Additional messages left at Eluchil, WP Rave, and Kasha. — Quadzilla99 23:28, 25 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Too much of this article is uncited and the "music" and "fashion" sections in particular read like fanfiction. "Homeless traveling squatter punks armed themselves with digital equipment and fused technology into their street sounds." In addition I get the impression that the standards for featured articles have changed a lot since 2005. It's hard for me to imagine that this could be a featured article today. --P4k 00:30, 25 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

P4k, per please use {{subst:FARMessage|Cyberpunk}} to notify the main contributors to the article (identifiable through the edit history page), the editor who originally nominated the article for Featured Article status (identifiable through the article history), and any relevant WikiProjects of this review. You can see examples of notifications on other FARs on this page. Thanks, SandyGeorgia (Talk) 00:41, 25 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Concur with P4k. There is a lot material needing citing: a mixture of very interpretive material where a source needs to be given for the origin of the opinion, (e.g. "Cyberpunk provides people an outlet for creativity and self-expression") and vague statements which should be refined and sourced to become verifiable fact (e.g. "Whole groups have formed of people who embrace the ideals of cyberpunk. These groups of people center mostly on the Internet, but have been known to congregate. Groups of cyberpunks can be seen gathering to do LARP and as a culture is often connected to the rave scene."). I would also suggest a rewrite of the lead section, and a review of the prose lists (e.g. of authors). Regards, The Land 11:05, 25 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary[edit]

Suggested FA criteria concerns are citations (1c) and prose quality (1a). Marskell 17:43, 12 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment Citations need formatting. LuciferMorgan 08:33, 20 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Remove. External link farm, unformatted citations, MOS issues (for example, WP:MSH, italicized quotes). Cite needed tags, and fan-crufty prose. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 19:52, 8 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Remove Concur with above and also rather weaselly. --RelHistBuff 14:01, 9 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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