Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Ten-pin bowling/archive1

Ten-pin bowling[edit]

One of the fastest growing sports yet relatively in the shadows - it's making a major comeback. Looking at past featureed article this suits I think.—Preceding unsigned comment added by Fjorn (talk • contribs)

Object The lead is too short- WP:WIAFA requires that the lead be a brief overview of the article. WP:LEAD provides that the article should have at least 2 paragraphs. There is only one reference/inline citation, which isn't cited properly according to WP:CITE, and a few external links strewn throughout the text. Please use   for the space between numbers and units of measurements- for example 10 pounds. Thanks, AndyZ _t 01:21, 28 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Object Very wordy, as if its been padded out to appear encyclopediac. The play sections needs to be seperated into subsections, something like, objective, equipment, method, scoring. Similar to the way you would teach someone new to the game. There needs to be more information on the surface types, preparation methods(oiling) etc. History section needs to show not just the sports initial creation period but also its expansion across the world. Theres more points but fixing these and User:AndyZ will probably rectify the others anyway. Gnangarra 15:27, 28 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - a couple of more suggestions, the images need to include some back end shots, maybe the pin deck, or table while setting pines. The section UK governing bodies needs to go, or at least replaced with a generic section covering bodies world wide. Gnangarra 01:55, 31 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

User:Danaman5 has kindly rewritten "lead per FA nomination comments" 3.166231447 I just wanted to say thank you. Allot more had been doneon this article and I hope allot more will continue to be done and for additional comments, such as the above, will be made with suggestions for improvements. Thank you. User:Fjorn

Object - The lead is short and the article has insufficient references with inconsistent formatting. The scoring section needs to be prose and not a list. The article uses both "ten-pin" and "ten pin". The diagram of the numbered positions should be moved up to where the article uses the numbers in discussion. Captions needs improvement, such as "US Air Force Chief James A. Martin bowling" -- why should I care that this is James Martin? Avoid second person (ex: If you score a Strike in frame 10 you will get 2 bonus balls). The article claims that the pins form an equilateral triangle, but I'm not sure that is correct. If the sides of the triagle are four feet as the article states, the distance from the 1 pin to the 7-10 line would be a little under 3.5 feet, but this site, if it is accurate, states that the 1 pin should be 2 feet 10 3/16ths inches from the pin. Also, there should be a picture of the ball that shows the holes. Pagra shtak 06:36, 31 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Object, as it lacks inline citations throughout. They would be particularily helpful in the Rules section. Tito xd^{(?!? - help us)} 21:10, 31 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - Well, although it is far from complete I must thank all who have commented here, made suggestions and improved the article in general. Any more help you can offer, or put into the suggestions already noted above, it would be even more appreciated Thank you all! Fjorn 21:42, 10 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I just can't believe the comment made in the introduction that this is the biggest participation sport in the UK. I have never heard anyone say this before, whereas I have frequently heard that fishing is the biggest participation sport in the UK. Is this claim verifiable? GavinTillman 13:19, 23 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]