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The article was promoted by User:GrahamColm 10:33, 10 February 2013‎ [1].

Kenneth Widmerpool[edit]

Nominator(s): Brianboulton (talk) 13:39, 3 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Widmerpool is, according to most critical opinion, one of the great monsters of 20th century fiction: a supreme egotist, small-minded and vindictive, lacking in social graces or cultural sensitivities, yet, mysteriously, becoming ever more successful and powerful as Anthony Powell's long novel sequence proceeds (though he gets his comeuppance in the end). He has held an awful fascination for readers and critic alike; Evelyn Waugh complained that there wasn't enough of him in the books, and Powell's contemporaries vied with each other for the honour of being the real-life model. The article has benefited from an insightful peer review to which several contributed; thanks to all concerned. Brianboulton (talk) 13:39, 3 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support – I took part in the peer review, where my few quibbles were thoroughly dealt with. I refrain from comment on the images (I am no expert on WP's rules) but the text seems to me to meet all FA criteria: balanced, well proportioned, comprehensively researched and referenced, and a pleasure to read. Tim riley (talk) 14:26, 3 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Thanks for your PR work and for your support here. Brianboulton (talk) 23:41, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support – As per Tim riley, above, my minor points were all dealt with at peer review and the article has improved further since then. A wholehearted support on another excellent article. - SchroCat (talk) 14:44, 3 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks and ditto as for Tim Brianboulton (talk) 23:41, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support I also helped somewhat during the peer review, and was very impressed with the article, which is a gripping and engaging read through out. This is a remarkably well written page and exhaustively sourced, and though long it never dips, labours or lost my attention. Ceoil (talk) 15:15, 3 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your support and help (it isn't really that long, a mere 4000 words) Brianboulton (talk) 23:41, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support and comments from Cassianto: Firstly, congratulations on a neatly put together article. I found it to be a thoroughly enjoyable read with no major faults to report. Nearly all of my quibbles surround possible overlinking:

  • Do we need to link Second World War?
  • Maybe for younger readers? It did end 68 years ago
  • Do we need to link Buckingham Palace?
  • Perhaps for the benefit of non-English readers?
  • Do we need to link solicitors?
  • Likewise; I don't think, for example, that US readers are familiar with this UK term for lawyers.
  • OK (sorry too much digestion of a WP guideline maybe). -- CassiantoTalk 02:00, 5 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Yes when used as a mosifier, as it is here ("a music-hall burlesque")
  • I have learnt something today, thanks! -- CassiantoTalk 02:00, 5 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Could Eton College have a link in the image caption?
  • Yes, done.
  • Likewise Longford and Beale?
  • Also done.
  • Overlink to Labour. First in "Career" (4th para), next in "Real life models" (1st para).
  • What is DVD box format? DVD format is linkable so would this be correct? Obviously you wouldn't link to this for disambiguation reasons, but the former was unrecognised on Google and WP, so I would drop "box". -- CassiantoTalk 19:30, 3 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I've fixed the last point as per your suggestion. Thank you for these comments. Brianboulton (talk) 22:57, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support - Ceoil, ScroCat and Tim have said it all. I reviewed the piece for the PR, honestly only finding minor nitpicks, all of which Brian quickly resolved. Widmerpoole is an engaging read and more importantly, I believe, it sets an excellent example for an article about a fictional character. I'd also like to note at how impressed I am at the process of taking the article to PR first, where it had a lot of attention, which meant it was in very good shape by the time of the nomination. Thanks for the good read - very well done. Truthkeeper (talk) 17:10, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for participating in the peer review, and for your support here. I invariably try for a peer review before nominating at FAC. Unfortunately the PR process remains in near-crisis, with simply not enough reviewers prepared to give time to it; at least a quarter of articles sent there are not getting reviewed. This is a concern I have raised before, and will probably need to raise again. Brianboulton (talk) 23:41, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Source review:

  • All sources look reliable and high quality.
  • Ref 4: Should there be a space in "Spring1971"?
  • Refs 17, 63: p used rather than pp for page range
  • For refs 22, 23, 55, 57, 58, 71, 76 and 77 as an online version is used, do we need an access date?
  • As these are all originally printed articles rather than website entries, access dates are not required> Brianboulton (talk) 22:57, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Compare refs 12, 15 and 41: if the first two use p. for the second page reference, should ref 41 use pp. for the second page range?
  • Compare refs 55, 56 and 70: Is there a reason for the distinction between The Daily Telegraph and the Telegraph Online when all go to the same site? Similarly, why do some of the publications referenced online use "online" within the name of the publisher/journal, but others do not?
  • The articles cited to online sources are those which I cannot be certain first appeared in the printed versions of the newspapers/journals. They are therefore treated as web entries. There is some element of uncertatinty, but I have sought to be consistent. Brianboulton (talk) 22:57, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • For the sources lacking an ISBN, could an OCLC number be used?
  • Unfortunately, for some reason Worldcat does not list the Fontana editions of the series which I have used, so I can't supply the OCLCs. Brianboulton (talk) 22:57, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Everything else fine. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:02, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Image review:

  • I will have to ask a more competent image editor than me to deal with the resizings requested on the image page. I will get on to this. Brianboulton (talk) 22:57, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Many thanks to Ruhrfisch for dealing with the above. Brianboulton (talk) 10:05, 5 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support: I'm not quite sure where Brian gets all his ideas from, but this is another fantastic article. An excellent read, as others have said better than I can. Just some extremely minor nit-picks which do not affect my support. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:21, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Kenneth Widmerpool becomes the principal embodiment of these.[5]": The previous sentence refers to both middle classes and the Establishment, making this sentence slightly ambiguous.
  • "Widmerpool is the only one of the sequence's 300-odd character": Should this be characters rather than character?
  • A typo missed by me and several other readers. Thanks for spotting it. Brianboulton (talk) 23:15, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The part of Widmerpool was played, reportedly with "audible pomposity", by Brian Hewlett…": Reported by who? I always find "reportedly" slightly weak, but feel free to disagree here. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:21, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think you are right on "reportedly", and I have reworded. It is a second-hand comment reported on the Anthony Powell Society website; I have removed the quotes, as the original wording is "the pomposity was audible". Brianboulton (talk) 23:15, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Extremely well-written article. Of course, I have some nitpicky comments.
Lead
  • Literary analysts have noted Widmerpool's main defining characteristics: lack of culture, small-mindedness, a capacity for intrigue; generally, an embodiment of many of the worst aspects of the British character. - Characteristics and an embodiment don't have a verb between them. I think "they are" would help, or maybe ; generally, he is the embodiment of ...
Character
  • He first came across the name, he said, through the 17th century book, Memoirs of the Life of Colonel Hutchinson, which features a Captain of Horse, Major Joseph Widmerpoole, who served in Cromwell's army under Hutchinson during the English Civil War. - I think through should be replaced with in.
Career
  • Jenkins becomes his junior officer and observes Widmerpool's industry, also his endless capacity for intrigue. - Also really doesn't work here. Perhaps just a simple and or in addition to.
Critical and popular reception
  • Might be helpful to link running gag (as running joke).
  • I don't honestly think people will be mystified by "running joke" Brianboulton (talk) 23:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Real-life models
  • Many readers and literary analysts have presumed that Widmerpool was drawn from life. - I think life should be extended to Powell's life. As it stands it's a little general.
  • Capel-Dunn was nicknamed "The Papal Bun" and derided by his subordinates for his appearance and demeanour. - was derided
  • "a very fat, extremely boring, overwhelmingly ambitious arriviste. His conversations were hideously detailed and humourless". - This probably needs a citation.
  • It is cited, but I placed the citation (wrongly) at the end of the paragraph. Now properly positioned. Brianboulton (talk) 23:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

ceranthor 18:51, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for these comments and your support. Except in the one case noted, I have folowed your suggested and amended the text accordingly. Brianboulton (talk) 23:34, 4 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Yup, all fixed.

Late comment: I'm not sure if it's for formatting reasons, but in your quote box in the "Critical and popular reception" section, there is a gap between "Twentieth-Century Literature" and the citation number [7]. - SchroCat (talk) 04:10, 9 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

A missing full stop - well spotted. Brianboulton (talk) 10:02, 9 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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