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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Laser brain via FACBot (talk) 26 October 2020 [1].

In the Aeroplane Over the Sea[edit]

Nominator(s): Famous Hobo (talk) 22:36, 23 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, third times the charm. Hopefully.

This article is about In the Aeroplane Over the Sea, one of the most widely beloved and incessantly mocked indie rock albums ever made. With weirdly named instruments and even weirder lyrics (this is the "semen stains the mountaintop" album), In the Aeroplane Over the Sea is a bizarre album that in theory shouldn't work, but my goodness it does.

The first FAC nomination failed because I had personal issues to attend to so I couldn't respond to comments. The second FAC nomination failed because of not enough comments. Now it's back (with a brand new aftermath section courtesy of BLZ. @Aoba47:, @Casliber: (as the two editors who supported the FAC last time, sorry to keep making you guys do this), @Nikkimaria: (as the editor who supported the FAC based on a source review), and @Buidhe: as the editor who gave the media review. Famous Hobo (talk) 22:36, 23 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Cas Liber[edit]

Okay then...looking good...

  • The On Avery Island tour generated enough money to afford the band members to move to Athens, Georgia... - not how I'd use the verb "afford", maybe "The On Avery Island tour generated enough money to enable the band members to move to Athens, Georgia"
  • The final band member came when Mangum was traveling to New York City to live with Koster. - odd construction - maybe, "Mangum found the final band member while traveling to New York City to live with Koster. " or somesuch..
@Casliber: How does the sentence look now? Also took care of the other issue. Famous Hobo (talk) 09:44, 24 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
All good now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:04, 24 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Aoba47[edit]

I have contributed to the past two FACs for this article. I agree with Casliber's assessment that this article appears ready for promotion. I have read through it a few times, and I do not have any further suggestions. I support this for promotion. Aoba47 (talk) 20:01, 25 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from SatDis[edit]

I picked out this article purely due to having listened to the album before. I have just left a few comments which will hopefully help to make the article even better.

  • I noticed the '50s progression has the apostrophe but the 90s underground does not. Is that because the "90s" is from a quote?
  • I don't know if Ironically enough, is the best encyclopedic language; maybe just "Ironically,"?
  • but could not bring himself to tell the band. Some of them had quit their jobs to be in the band, and it seemed impossible to... The repetition of "band" here. Could it be changed to "tell the other band members. Some of them had previously quit their day jobs to join the band, and Mangum perceived it as impossible..." Just a few changes to tighten that sentence?
  • As it was a successful vinyl in 2008, are there any anniversary vinyl reissues worth mentioning in the "Release" section?
  • I love the layout of the references as well. I haven't seen this much before, is there a particular reason for this style?

Apologies that there are not many suggestions, as the article is very well written and interesting. Best of luck with the FA nomination. If you get the chance, I would greatly appreciate it if you could leave some comments on my FA review at Bluey (2018 TV series). Thanks. SatDis (talk) 06:59, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Coord notes[edit]

@Famous Hobo: Are you still active on this nomination? I see unaddressed comments from 6 October and very little activity. I've added this to the Urgents list in hopes of some more attention, but I also need to know ASAP if you have the bandwidth to work on feedback. --Laser brain (talk) 15:24, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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