Template:Did you know nominations/St Alban Hall, Oxford

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 00:12, 8 December 2020 (UTC)

St Alban Hall, Oxford

The Hall in 1832
The Hall in 1832

Created by Moonraker (talk) and TSventon (talk). Nominated by Moonraker (talk) at 08:03, 2 December 2020 (UTC).

Interesting lost building, on fine sources, offline sources accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. - The image is licensed and a god illustration. - If you want to please me and perhaps some readers further, give it a bit more lead and an infobox, and repeat the name - as you would for a person - in every section, instead of The Hall, - same for the caption here. Consider to mention the source for the principals just once on top of the list (with a sentence), instead of the clutter after each name, and you may want to collapse the navbox. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:02, 2 December 2020 (UTC)
Moonraker thank you for crediting my limited contributions. Gerda Arendt I have implemented your suggestions apart from collapsing the navbox, which I am neutral on, and expanding the lead. TSventon (talk) 15:32, 2 December 2020 (UTC)
Gerda, many thanks for the review. An info box is fine by me, but I only add them when there is a lot to display. Please let's not go in for that capital letter on "The", it is not much loved in England. And I do not think we should keep on repeating a full name, when using a short one is standard. Articles do read better that way. Moonraker (talk) 16:49, 2 December 2020 (UTC)
Thank you, both. No idea what "The" means, but possibly not relevant. One more about the hooks: I wonder about a missing comma after Oxford, and where to place the pictured clause, but bet that a prep builder can handle that. I'd prefer the original as more dramatic. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 17:08, 2 December 2020 (UTC)
Gerda, I have the same feeling that we are missing a comma , but it could come either before or after "(pictured)", and either option looks odder than no comma! So I am happy to leave it as it is and let someone else decide later. I agree with you that the main hook is the better one. Moonraker (talk) 10:10, 3 December 2020 (UTC)
ALT0a: ... that the 13th-century foundation St Alban Hall in Oxford (pictured) was closed in 1882 and demolished?
offering a solution without comma for consideration --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:15, 3 December 2020 (UTC)