Template:Did you know nominations/South African Air Force Memorial
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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 18:33, 29 August 2014 (UTC)
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South African Air Force Memorial[edit]
... that the South African Air Force Memorial (pictured) overlooks the first air force base of the South African Air Force?
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Aimee Fuller
- Comment: Can this be put on the main page on remembrance day (11/11)? Hook is cited by source 4.
5x expanded by Nathan121212 (talk). Self nominated at 22:29, 9 August 2014 (UTC).
5x expansion confirmed (not counting bulleted list as text in pre-expansion version); length OK; hook fact is cited adequately. Just awaiting a QPQ review. Note there is a free image for this article (at right) that the posting admin may chose to consider - Dumelow (talk) 07:36, 10 August 2014 (UTC)
- @Dumelow:
Done Nathan121212 (talk) 14:11, 10 August 2014 (UTC)
- Can this be featured on Remembrance Day (11 November)? Nathan121212 (talk) 15:12, 10 August 2014 (UTC)
- Sorry, no. Special occasion hooks can only be held for six weeks (with the exception of April Fools' Day hooks). MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 21:46, 10 August 2014 (UTC)
- @Mandarax: In that case, can this be put on 1 September (anniversary of unveiling). Nathan121212 (talk) 04:31, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- That timing would be fine, so anyone who feels it should be saved for that date can move the nomination to the Special occasion holding area. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 21:11, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
- @Dumelow:, did you check the sources for close paraphrasing? Yoninah (talk) 22:47, 13 August 2014 (UTC)
Indeed, on closer inspection there were some phrases used that were similar to a couple of the sources in particular. I have reworded to avoid this and will be more diligent in my checks in future. Thanks for letting me know. @Nathan121212: to make you aware - Dumelow (talk) 19:26, 15 August 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks @Dumelow:. Sorry about that, was trying to work fast to get the 5x expansion. Thanks for your checks. Nathan121212 (talk) 19:30, 15 August 2014 (UTC)
- Another case of the silliness of the 7-day rule's encouragement of rush.
- I wonder if it's really necessary to explain that the air force memorial overlooks the air force base of the air force.
- ALT1
... that the South African Air Force Memorial (pictured) overlooks the nation's first air base? - (The reader can find the article to the SA Air Force through the bolded article.) EEng (talk) 04:12, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- I like it. Nathan121212 (talk) 04:37, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- Hi, I just looked at the article and I think both hooks are pretty obvious. How about:
- ALT2:
... that the South African Air Force Memorial (pictured) includes a repository for ashes of past members of the South African Air Force?Yoninah (talk) 09:39, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- Way better. EEng (talk) 12:47, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- Seconded Nathan121212 (talk) 13:39, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- I wonder if it's really necessary to explain that they're past members -- after all, we don't expect to find the ashes of current members in there, do we? Without looking at the article just now, I wonder if fallen members, honored dead, that kind of thing, can be used instead? EEng (talk) 19:21, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- I quite like the sound of "fallen". Nathan121212 (talk) 19:24, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- I also thought of "fallen", but the source seems to imply that any past member's ashes are accepted, even if he didn't fall in service. Yoninah (talk) 19:33, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- How about ALT3:
... that any member of the South African Air Force is eligible to haveNathan121212 (talk) 19:39, 18 August 2014 (UTC)theirhis or her ashes interred at the South African Air Force Memorial (pictured)?- I like it. Does it apply to men and women? (Grammatically, it should read "his" or "his or her" instead of "their"). Yoninah (talk) 19:51, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- It applies to men and women, adjusting hook accordingly. Nathan121212 (talk) 19:58, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- I like it. Does it apply to men and women? (Grammatically, it should read "his" or "his or her" instead of "their"). Yoninah (talk) 19:51, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- I quite like the sound of "fallen". Nathan121212 (talk) 19:24, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- I wonder if it's really necessary to explain that they're past members -- after all, we don't expect to find the ashes of current members in there, do we? Without looking at the article just now, I wonder if fallen members, honored dead, that kind of thing, can be used instead? EEng (talk) 19:21, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- Seconded Nathan121212 (talk) 13:39, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- Way better. EEng (talk) 12:47, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
- ALT4: ... that veterans of the South African Air Force can have their ashes interred at the South African Air Force Memorial (pictured)? EEng (talk) 22:30, 18 August 2014 (UTC)