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The result was: promoted by FITINDIA 14:45, 18 March 2018 (UTC)

Paracletus cimiciformis[edit]

  • ... that as part of its life cycle, the aphid Paracletus cimiciformis has two genetically identical forms, one round and green, the other flattened and brown?
    • ALT1:... that on its secondary host, the aphid Paracletus cimiciformis has two genetically identical forms, one of which is taken by ants into their nest?

Created by Cwmhiraeth (talk). Self-nominated at 20:19, 27 February 2018 (UTC).

  • New enough, long enough, well written, neutral, and free of copyvio or close-paraphrasing. The article is properly sourced (I will AGF on the one offline source). QPQ has been completed. Both hooks are within the character limit and properly sourced. Overall, it's good to go.
However, I feel like you're not really making the most out of this DYK. The two different morphs with their shape and color variations are not what the species is notable for (or what the sources focus on). Rather, the interesting part is that one of the morphs is a mutualist while the other is a parasite. I really think you should try to come up with a new hook that focuses on that. Just my opinion; if you don't want to, ping me and I'll change this to a pass. G S Palmer (talkcontribs) 03:08, 28 February 2018 (UTC)
@G S Palmer: Agreed. I don't really think of an aphid as a parasite, more as a herbivore. The trouble is in creating a hook that is both accurate and comprehensible while remaining within the 200 character limit. Any suggestions? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:25, 28 February 2018 (UTC)
@Cwmhiraeth: sorry for the late reply. How about something along the lines of:
  • ALT2:... that the mutualistic aphid Paracletus cimiciformis will occasionally turn on the ants that care for it and parasitize their young?
  • ALT3:... that the mutualistic aphid Paracletus cimiciformis will sometimes grow into a form that turns on the ants that care for it and feeds on their young?
I think ALT3 is slightly better, but it's up to you. G S Palmer (talkcontribs) 19:37, 8 March 2018 (UTC)
@G S Palmer: I don't much care for ALT2, but ALT3 is better. How about
@Cwmhiraeth: I would change "starts feeding on" to "feeds on" for the sake of brevity and catchiness, but other than that, it looks fine. Good to go. G S Palmer (talkcontribs) 20:07, 8 March 2018 (UTC)
Thanks. I have made the change you suggest. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:34, 8 March 2018 (UTC)