Template:Did you know nominations/Baloke

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 09:07, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

Baloke[edit]

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... ~~that Baloke, a small village in Punjab, India, is the birthplace of Satnam Singh Bhamara - the first Indian to be drafted into the NBA?~~ Source:http://indianexpress.com/article/sports/sport-others/draft-winds-sweep-satnam-singh-bhamras-dusty-village-ballo-ke/http://www.thehindu.com/sport/other-sports/satnam-singh-gets-drafted-in-nba/article7359269.ece

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Ampulloclitocybe clavipes

Created by Fitindia (talk). Self-nominated at 16:58, 17 October 2017 (UTC).

Article is new, long enough, no copyvio issues. The hook is well-cited and interesting although I would adjust the hook slightly to read like this :
ALT1: ... that Baloke, a small village in Punjab, India, is the birthplace of Satnam Singh Bhamara - the first Indian to be drafted into the National Basketball Association?Source:http://indianexpress.com/article/sports/sport-others/draft-winds-sweep-satnam-singh-bhamras-dusty-village-ballo-ke/http://www.thehindu.com/sport/other-sports/satnam-singh-gets-drafted-in-nba/article7359269.ece

Writing "National Basketball Association" in full is better as not everyone knows what the NBA could be referring to. Jon Kolbert (talk) 14:56, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

@Jon Kolbert: yes I think ALT1 is better. Thank you. FITINDIA 15:32, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

@Fitindia: Perfect. QPQ done, hook is good to go. Jon Kolbert (talk) 15:53, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

@Fitindia: please address the clarification tag that I added. I edited the page for English grammar; please also check that I didn't add/erase something by mistake. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 20:48, 25 October 2017 (UTC)

@Yoninah: thank you for the edit, looks much better now. I have added the citation that was required. Thank you. FITINDIA 03:51, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

@Fitindia: thank you. While you quoted the source accurately, the sex ratios don't make sense. A ratio is a figure like 1:1 (one out of one), not a single number like 905. Unless this figure means 905 out of 1000? Perhaps you have a different source for the average sex ratio and child sex ratio? Yoninah (talk) 08:49, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

@Yoninah: yes the figures are out of 1000. Thank you for pointing that out. I have added it to the article. FITINDIA 08:59, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks. Wow, India has so many more males than females? Restoring tick per Jon Kolbert's review. Yoninah (talk) 09:06, 26 October 2017 (UTC)