Talk:Wyoming-class battleship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 15:11, 30 July 2015 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:11, 30 July 2015 (UTC)

• No DABs, two dead links.
  • Fixed the DANFS links
• Images appropriately licensed.
• Move boilers to power parameter. Shp is duplicated.
  • Fixed - don't think I remembered to clean up the infobox
• Suggest moving the note entry in the infobox to the header like so: (as built)
  • Maybe it's the sleep deprivation, but I can't figure out how to do this. And Template:Infobox ship begin is not helpful.
• No hyphen Wyoming-class in the lede. Conversely, add one here: twin gun
  • I do these things to see if you're paying attention. At least that's what I tell myself.
    • <snicker>--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:11, 3 August 2015 (UTC)
• significantly more powerful 14 in (356 mm) gun, but it would have entailed significant delays One too many "significant/ly" in close proximity.
  • Fixed the second one
• and required extensive improvements to accommodate What kind of improvements? Infrastructure? Or ship design things?
  • Clarified
• Improved deck armor or just more of it?
  • Good point.
• By 1944, she had been assigned Howzabout "was" in lieu of the passive verbiage?
  • How about "served"?
• Link fire support and bombardment vessel, mainmast
  • Linked
• with casemates in the main deck "on", I think, rather than "in"
  • Fixed
• Can you add a line drawing? More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:35, 1 August 2015 (UTC)
  • I looked for one when I wrote it, but I haven't been able to find anything.
• destroyed ventilation system Ventilation or exhaust?
  • Good point.
• transverse metacentric height Transverse? AFAIK, it's just plain metacentric.
  • You can have a longitudinal metacentric height as well (see here - it's not as commonly mentioned, but Groener usually includes both so I got in the habit of specifying.
• Watch for duplicate links.
  • Fixed now
• which was 8 ft (2.4 m) wide High is preferable, I think.
  • Sounds fine to me
• Arkansas received her reconstruction watch for passive voice--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:10, 1 August 2015 (UTC)
  • That's actually active voice. Parsecboy (talk) 12:43, 3 August 2015 (UTC)