Talk:William Feiner/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:50, 28 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

If you wish to link English language, then link the whole "English language" rather than just "English".
- Done. Ergo Sum 00:28, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"December 27, 1792 in the city " comma after 1792, and is "the city of" really needed?
- Done. I include "city of" so as to distinguish it from the province the city is in. Ergo Sum 00:29, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"July 12, 1808 in White Russia[4] (i.e. Belarus),[5] " comma after 1808, and I would dare suggest that (i.e. Belarus) really should be footnote.
- Added comma. Ergo Sum 00:41, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
" the Holy Roman Empire[7] and Galicia." awkward ref placement, I think the readers can wait to the end of the sentence (two more words) for [7]. And where is "Galicia" referenced?
- Done. And, it's in the Burson & Wright ref. Ergo Sum 00:30, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
If it was me, I wouldn't link "Polish" or "German", those are very common geographical terms.
- Ordinarily, I would agree with you. Here, though, they are the focus of the conversation, rather than just mentioned in passing, so I think it makes sense to link them. Ergo Sum 00:31, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"William Feiner.[3] From 1823 to 1826, Feiner was" No need to repeat Feiner so quickly, just use "he" here.
- Done. Ergo Sum 00:32, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Now then, you pipe both "Germans" and "German language" to "German". This is potentially confusing (as a rule of thumb, I never use the same piped text for different links)...
- Clarified. Ergo Sum 00:33, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Definitely, 100% no need to link Europe.
- Unlinked. Ergo Sum 00:34, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Nor "librarian".
- Unlinked. Ergo Sum 00:35, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Nor New York, but I would advise stating "New York City" rather than leave the potential vagaries of the state of NY.
- Clarified. Ergo Sum 00:35, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"permitted to resign the office and eagerly set sail " I smiled here because it could be read that he was permitted to eagerly set sail.
- I've rephrased to avoid the confusion. Ergo Sum 00:40, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"May 4, 1826[4] by" comma after 1826.
- Done. Ergo Sum 00:40, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 14: p. 201–202 should be pp.
- Done. Ergo Sum 00:41, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That's it, mainly trivial. All the GA criteria principally covered, so just these trivia to cover. The Rambling Man (REJOICE!) 19:56, 28 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: I believe I've addressed all your comments. Thank you for them. Ergo Sum 01:05, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

All looks fine to me, so I've passed this nomination. Good work. The Rambling Man (REJOICE!) 07:20, 1 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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