Talk:West Highland White Terrier/GA1
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Reviewer: Mdk572 (talk · contribs) 20:41, 6 October 2011 (UTC) My first review so will read up on the Guidelines and start in the next day or so Marj (talk) 20:41, 6 October 2011 (UTC)
Comments[edit]
Reasonably well written
- Lead para 1. “didn't want to be known as such” — “but did not want...”?
- Lead para 1, “it” para 2 “they” — be consistent across the lead.
- History para 1 “The king ordered for a dozen terriers to be procured” — “ordered a dozen” “ordered that a dozen terriers be procured”?
- History para 2 “were being kept distinct from other breeds” — “were kept distinct”?
- History paras 3 & 4 Para four begins “A third breed” but the three aren’t clear, perhaps a separate paragraph for each? The first sentence in para 3 is not connected to the rest of the paragraph.
- History para 3 “bred a breed”— rephrase?
- History para 3 “Malcolm decided to soley develop a white terrier breed” — possible misinterpretation: Malcolm decided to breed them by himself, or to breed only white terriers.
- History para 3 “The first generation of Poltallochs had.... already developed their prick ears” — The Poltallochs or the Westies prick ears?
- History para 4 “regardless of to what male dog it was bred” — Awkward “regardless of the colour of the sire”?
- History para 4 “In 1903 Malcolm declared that” — No previous mention of Malcolm in this paragraph. Re-order paragraphs or remind reader who he is. Similarly with “his breed of white terriers”
- History para 6 “didn't count” — Too informal an expression?
- Appearance para 2 “get older” — Too informal an expression?
- Temperament para 2 “They are hardy, but can be stubborn” — Not sure hardiness and stubbornness are linked.
- Temperament para 2 “It does remain the instincts of an earth-dog” — retain? Though “and retains those inquisitive and investigative traits”
- Health para 3 “between the ages of under a year through to middle age” — Awkward
Marj (talk) 22:55, 6 October 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for reading it though. I've made changes where suggested and also gone through the entire article to switch all the "they" and "their" to "it" as it went beyond just the lead. Also re-ordered those sections in the history in order to ensure that that the Malcolm information is all together. Miyagawa (talk) 20:24, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
It reads really well, Miyagawa, just a tweak away from GA, I think Marj (talk) 21:06, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
Images
- Historical images seem to be 'public domain'.
- Consider flipping or swapping images so the dogs look into the page?
- Add Alt tags for people accessing the page using text readers.
References
- The mix of full and short citations seems odd, particularly using abbreviated citations for the first listing of a reference. But reading the masses of Wikipedia info on referencing it seems to be consistent with the guidelines.
- Give place names consistently as town, state.
- Dead link for ANKC standard in infobox
- No disambig links
Marj (talk) 21:06, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
Review[edit]
1. Well written?:
- Prose quality:
- Manual of Style compliance:
2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
- References to sources:
- Citations to reliable sources, where required:
- No original research:
3. Broad in coverage?:
- Major aspects:
- Focused:
4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
- Fair representation without bias:
5. Reasonably stable?
- No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):
6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
- Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
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