Talk:Vocabulary development/GA1

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Reviewer: MasterOfHisOwnDomain (talk · contribs) 11:08, 31 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Opening Comment:

I will be reviewing this article according to the GA criteria (as laid out below), and choosing to either pass or fail the article accordingly. I will be addressing any concerns within the article and leaving comments about how they can be dealt with. MasterOfHisOwnDomain (talk) 11:08, 31 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • The caption for the first image is quite poor, see criteria for a good caption: it highlights the obvious, does not explain its relevancy to the topic etc.
  • "Babbling" should be interlinked, as it is a term that may be unfamiliar to general readers/is of significance in the topic.
  • Some use of italics are unnecessary: e.g. school years. See MoS on Italics.
  • Ledes shouldn't really contain references, as their content should be replicated in the main body of the article and cited there. Consider whether these references could be put elsewhere.
  • "Throughout the school years," their school years?
  • "At this age," what age specifically? Ambiguous.
  • "after they turn one." from the age of one years old?
  • "The subcomponents of language are: ... combination of words into sentences." these sentences seem related but unconnected specifically to the topic, could you indicate in what ways each of the subcomponents relates to vocabulary development?
  • "Here are the highlights of phonological development in children:" highlights seems an odd phrase here, consider rephrasing?
  • The article seems to focus entirely on children. Are there any points to make about vocabulary development into early adulthood and beyond?
  • There are a few places in which the references do not appear numerically, as they should, i.e., [3] [15] not [15] [3].
  • "So how does the language learner successfully map words onto the correct objects, concepts, and actions?" non-encyclopaedic language; this sentence needs to be restructured away from asking a question.
  • "Children must learn to use their words appropriately and strategically in social situations." seems to end prematurely; consider reword to: "It is considered essential that children use their...".
  • "was 'here', 'that' or 'look'" these words are formatted differently from other cases where words are the subject of a sentence; you've used italics elsewhere. Is there a reason for this difference or simply an error?
  • Canonical links to a disambiguation page; you need to select the specific use of this term and link there instead.
  • "Many claim that children experience" is a weasel word; those who have claimed should be clearly attributed.
  • "Fast mapping has been shown to be used" perhaps offer a very small definition of this term, since it seems obvious to me that people will have to follow that link.

Note: Some of these comments are highly detailed and not strictly necessary for completion of GA, particularly those concerning grammar and language-use. Although it would be very beneficial for these issues to be addressed, the main concerns are:

  • The article's bias on children's use of language. (GA criteria 3a: major aspects)
  • The article's bias towards children's vocabulary development in the West. (GA criteria 3a: major aspects)
  • "Pragmatic influences"; why is this section bullet-pointed? Could be a violation of MoS.

Otherwise the article is comprehensive (in those areas it talks about), and well referenced, with prose that is readable and informative - though not exceptional (criteria for Featured article status). Well done! MasterOfHisOwnDomain (talk) 17:28, 2 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]


GA critera

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Summary Problems have been resolved sufficiently for promotion to GA, and all parts of the criteria are fulfilled by the article in its current status. MasterOfHisOwnDomain (talk) 11:24, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Result: Pass. MasterOfHisOwnDomain (talk) 11:32, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]