Talk:Sword Art Online/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 17:10, 23 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I'll be reviewing the article. I think it is suited to become a GA but there are somethings that could be improved.

I'm not familiar with the franchise but I managed to understand the plot section pretty well so I think the grammar is okay.
The lead section does not need a reference as long as it is included within the article's body. You could trim the mention of games a bit by simply saying "for multiple video game consoles" in the lead. Also considering Kazuto is the protagonist of the story, he could be mentioned there.
Is it possible to create a production section by combining information from the light novels section with some of the information the characters articles have? There seems to be a lot of potential for a good section.
While I understand the word dōjinshi, some unfamiliar readers might be confused so a clarification might be helpful
Reki Kawahara's name is wikilinked twice in the novels section.
The novels' sales seem more fitting on the reception

The following paragraphs need references

"A single compilation volume was released on August 10, 2015. An eighth manga, titled Sword Art Online: Mother's Rosario and also by Hazuki Tsubasa, is based on the seventh volume of the novel series and began serialization in the July 2014 issue of Dengeki Bunko Magazine. A ninth manga, titled Sword Art Online Alternative Gun Gale Online, began serialization in the November 2015 issue of Dengeki Maoh."

and

"A tenth manga, titled Sword Art Online: Project Alicization and illustrated by Kōtarō Yamada, based on the Alicization arc of the light novel series, began serialization in the September 2016 issue of Dengeki Bunko Magazine."

For the anime section, there is once again a link to the Kawahara's name.
The opening and ending songs could be removed since the episode list tend to explain those.
Lastly, is it possible to get reviews involving the original media? From I've read there many novels were released in the West.

Other than that, I see no further issues. The reception is as a neutral as possible, showing both positive and negative points of reviews while there are no free images of Kawahara to add. The article covers all types of media so it passes 3 while it appears there it is also stable. Just provide a bit of the issues I mentioned and I'll gladly pass this article. Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 17:10, 23 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments. I'm a bit busy at the moment so I can only do some of the suggested edits; perhaps the Development and Reception sections could be left to other editors with more experience writing such sections, such as Juhachi, Sakura Cartelet, or G S Palmer. Narutolovehinata5 ^tccsdnew 01:26, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Tintor2: As for the music, rather than complete removal, may I suggest that they be moved into its own "Music" section? Narutolovehinata5 ^tccsdnew 02:20, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

And I'm finished with most of the requested edits, save for the development/reception sections. I've also moved the music information to its own "Music" section, which also discusses the series' soundtrack and character songs. Narutolovehinata5 ^tccsdnew 03:13, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Good work. Still, I suggest creating a section for the video games based on how many games there are.Tintor2 (talk) 15:41, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Tintor2: Passed already? I still have to do the development and reception sections (which I plan to do in the next few days or so). Narutolovehinata5 ^tccsdnew 16:24, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Didn't you say you left that to the other writer since you weren't that experienced?Tintor2 (talk) 17:32, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I might just do it tomorrow since Juhachi said he doesn't have time. Narutolovehinata5 ^tccsdnew 17:47, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]