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I didn't read this thoroughly, but I was tempted to slap an {{advert}} tag on it. It's pretty neutrally worded, but still strikes me as a bit propagandistic. I might be biased. But it's hard to tell how neutral this is without any citations of reliable sources... Katr67 23:05, 8 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

As other editors have noted both above and with the {{advertisement}} tag on the article, the article read more like a public relations release than a neutral encyclopedia article. I have begun to remove the promotional language.

To begin with I deleted the peacock language of the infobox “Field of Research” parameter: “PNNL delivers leadership and advancements”.
I removed the entire “Missions and Core Capabilities” section because it was hopelessly promotional and would require a fundamental rewrite to become encyclopedic. A mission statement is useful as advertising and for internal focus, but it is inherently unencyclopedic. Perhaps there is something salvageable in the section, but I can’t identify it. (And although I expect it to be deleted, I moved the holograph image for now to another place.)

Other sections that need attention:

In the “Notable scientists” section: The paragraphs on Laboratory Fellows and Battelle Fellows are meaningful to PNNL employees, but these recognitions are not notable for our general audience. If the section is to be retained, the paragraph on external awards should perhaps be expanded, naming names and achievements.
I am not sure what the point is in the point is in the list of PNNL directors. (I assume that Ron Paul, Tommy Ambrose, and Leonard Peters are not the same people that have articles.) —teb728 t c 08:40, 31 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]