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Layman's terms[edit]

I am a layman having vision problems caused by a posterior vitreus detachment. Reading the literature in pubmed I came across "straylight" and came here to find out what it is. This description is of no help. "the radiation seen spreading from a bright light source against a dark background" means nothing to me. What is it? Please make this useful to a non-opthalmologist. An opposing car's headlights look like two points of light. That tells me nothing and I sense that you think that this will evoke some visual model or image to the reader. It does not, or at least nothing useful. Imagining two headlights, or two points of light, gives me no insight into what the visual effect is that you are trying to describe. I gain no understanding here, which I do very much need, from reading this. Please target the layman and consider whether you language succeeds in conveying knowledge of what straylight is. After reading this, I know no more than when I came here. Wikipedia is financially supported by the masses. It is not a place for opthalmologists to state opthalmology for other opthalmologists. Help me out here, please.— Preceding unsigned comment added by 207.109.140.134 (talk • contribs) 01:25, 29 November 2015‎

I think it may be not so much that the article is written for opthalmologists, as that it is just not very well written. This article clearly needs more work.--Srleffler (talk) 08:01, 29 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I took a stab at cleaning up the lead paragraph. It needs to be worked on by someone more knowledgeable in the field, however.--Srleffler (talk) 08:16, 29 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]