Talk:Mayored to the Mob/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

Good work overall. Some mostly minor comments:

  • Shortly after their arrival, a riot breaks out, and Homer notices that Mark Hamill and Mayor Quimby, who are attending the convention, are in danger of being trampled due to the riot. - A cliffhanger. What caused the riot?
  • Homer begins training at "Leavelle's Bodyguard Academy", where he shortly graduates and begins his new job as Quimby's bodyguard. "Shortly graduates"?
  • Discovering Quimby has not falling to his death and is in fact hanging on a ledge, Homer makes him promise to expose Fat Tony in return for Homer pulling Quimby back to safety. "Has not falling" is grammatically incorrect.
    • Yep, I have been known to make the odd grammatical error here and there. ;) Qst (talk) 17:41, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ron Hauge, writer of the episode, wanted to do an episode where he would use Homer's qualities such as: oafishness, brute strength, thickness, and loyalty, for good. Not sure the colon is needed.
  • Kill the all-caps in ref #9's title.
  • Looks good otherwise. I've placed the article on-hold to allow for these minor issues to be addressed. Cheers, –Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 17:26, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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