Talk:Mary Bell (aviator)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nick-D (talk • contribs • count) 02:07, 17 September 2011 (UTC)

Comments

This is a very solid article Ian. I've got a few relatively minor comments though:

• What's a 'Grade 'A' private pilot's licence'?
  • I don't know, but it sounds like a jolly good thing to have...! Seriously, I don't recall the source giving any further detail... :-(
    • Fair enough. I assume that 'A' would be the highest grade, though I suppose it could also be the lowest... Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 20 September 2011 (UTC)
      • I think I can say for sure "A" would be highest based on related gradings I've seen from that time -- for instance the RAAF's No. 1 FTS ran "A" courses for permanent staff and "B" courses for Citizen Air Force (reserve) personnel... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:03, 20 September 2011 (UTC)
• What's a 'ground engineer'? (I presume it's the qualification needed to be part of ground crew for aircraft)
  • That was how I took it -- again the source didn't give further detail, and after checking quickly round WP, it seems to be used frequently enough without links or explanations.
    • Fair enough as well Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 20 September 2011 (UTC)
• "who had hoped to be able to assist in aircraft maintenance in time of war" is a bit awkward (and the tense seems to swap over in mid-sentence). Something like 'who had volunteered to assist with aircraft maintenance during times of war' might work better.
  • Done, tks.
• "Bell continued to lobby, however, along with various women's groups desiring to support the war effort and to free male staff for overseas postings." is also a bit awkward
  • Had a go at rephrasing slightly.
• The link to Bell's ADB entry needs to be updated to reflect the recent change in URLs (you might want to use Template:Australian Dictionary of Biography for this).
  • Updated link, tks.
• While the coverage is fine for GA class, you might want to use Trove to search for further references if you haven't already done so (if Mary Bell was anything like the rest of the WNEL, there will be quite a few articles about her - many of which will have been self-written!). Nick-D (talk) 02:28, 17 September 2011 (UTC)
  • Actually I tried a Trove trawl (always wanted to say that!), as well as a search of the many books I've downloaded from the Air Power Development Centre, in the hopes of finding anything further prior to submitting to GAN, and it didn't seem to add much to what I had already or, where it did, seemed to beg further questions, so I left well enough alone... ;-) Tks for taking the time to review mate! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:40, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
    • I had a brief poke around in Trove, and nothing jumped out at me as being particularly useful either. Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

Assessment against GA criteria

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   Great work Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

   Many tks Nick. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:03, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

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"Founding leader"

I'm not about to muck about with this while it's on the Main Page, but it just strikes me as an odd construction. Wouldn't "founder and leader" be the usual way of saying this? Assuming I have it wrong, would it still not be "founder leader"? I know in British English "founder member" is used, rather than "founding member" which we say here in the States. Does this not apply in Australian English? Joefromrandb (talk) 22:15, 10 November 2019 (UTC)