Talk:Love in This Club Part II/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Xwomanizerx (talk) 05:14, 30 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Airplay is not a format, remove from the infobox. Done
In the first sentence, it should be noted that Beyoncé and Wayne are only featured vocalists on the song. See "Telephone (song)" and "Me Against the Music". Done
The second sentence should be switched with the third, since it's much more important to note the single release. Done
Remove "Usher's label". Done
"Follow up song" -> Sequel, answer song Done
"Number one lead single" seems a little biased, remove "Number one". Done
Information about the actual recording goes before the composition, including the mention of the sample. I'd suggest you expand the lead section a little bit on Usher's comment of the 'shock factor' or his praise of Beyoncé and Wayne. Done
Change "the Billboard Hot 100 in the United States" -> "U.S. Billboard Hot 100". Done
Add (RIAA) after Recording Industry Association of America. Done

The sample mention should definitely be moved to the composition section, and the writers removed.

Why should I remove the writers? Aren't they a key part of the background? Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:35, 30 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- The writers of the sample aren't key to this song. Xwomanizerx (talk) 05:43, 30 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - OK, done. Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:48, 30 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - Again, you don't have to remove the writers of Love In This Club Part II, only the writers of You Are Everything are irrelevant. Xwomanizerx (talk) 19:20, 30 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      - Oh, I see, that makes a lot more sense :) Adabow (talk · contribs) 19:46, 30 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The release paragraph looks messy, and you should consider moving it to the Background section and let this be a Critical reception section. Done
Add (2007) after "Crying Out for Me". Done

The other sections look good. Nice work overall! Xwomanizerx (talk) 05:14, 30 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]