Talk:Lockheed Martin VH-71 Kestrel/GA1

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Reviewer: Sp33dyphil ReadytoRumble 01:46, 30 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • "an AW101 derivative named as US101". Is "an" necessary? Same with "envisaged the aircraft performing in three major roles", where "in" is redundant.
The sentence doesn't seem to make sense without the 'an' in place, I've read it out several times, today and yesterday, it doesn't sound right. The 'in' is gone though. Kyteto (talk) 10:47, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I meant "as", the one before US101. Sorry for the inconvenience. Sp33dyphil ReadytoRumble
  • "Under the pact, AgustaWestland produced" --> "Under the pact, AgustaWestland would produce". Same with "The company produced other components".
  • remove caps from "Request for Proposals"
  • Remove capital letters.
Battered it around before figuring out how to get around a misdirect, now implimented and working. Kyteto (talk) 22:20, 2 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • a decision to "cancell", typo?
  • "estimated at $10B", please don't include abbreviations; keep it as $10 billion. Please make the same changes throughout the article.
  • [1] reveal 5 dead links and 8 websites with less-problematic issues.
  • Dead links fixed.
  • Please add an alt link to the image.
  • I'm not sure if you'll agree with me or not, but I think there are room for wikification, specifically underneath "Program problems and delays"
  • Remove link fro RFP. There's already an abbreviation next to Request for "Proposal" at first mention.
  • To finish it off, add {{Portal box|Military of the United States|Aviation}}
I have implimented the changes desired; standing by for further instructions. Kyteto (talk) 10:47, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

  • It says "Empty weight: 23,150 lb (10,500 kg)". The pound is a common unit and doesn't need to be linked.

Regards Lightmouse (talk) 15:20, 2 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]